Out

[Ozymandias]

Out

I want

Out

of here

Ah that one

loosened

a tooth

I think

Blood sweet

sour and tangy

like a knife

in my mouth

my eyes blur

with each

impact

Eyes

Vision

Vision

Out

Keep it

together

I'm

You're

not

getting out

of here

early

so use

the time

plan

wait

remember

add

subrtract

multiply

erase

Ha

Out

will come

soon

enough

For now

the orderlies

enter

even

now with

their normal

ruthless

effieciency

biting not

so rewarding

as hitting

the walls

of my white

white room

I broke

my ribs

too one

for you

and you

and you

the pain

reminds me

kicks thrown

in for

good measure

have to keep

them alert for

the dangerous

ones

they'll reset

my teeth

like always

and I will smile

my gratitude

to them

as I wait

and watch

and think

of the day

for the day

I am out

Glorious days

ahead I

have plenty

of time

to plan

you're asleep

but I am

always awake

[Silver WInd]

Interesting, I like this one.

[Ozymandias]

Thank you. This started as an exercise in exorcising anger, but when I sat down to write it, I'd calmed immensely.

 

I don't actually know what this is, specifically...

[Quincunx]

The editor in me wants to take an axe to the splintered lines, or maybe a broom--something, anything to make the English language read horizontally instead of vertically. However, since it's a free-write, I shouldn't.

[The Portrait of Zool]

It's mad - MAD I tell you! MADNESS!

 

 

It is indeed broken - it is not an easy read - but that's a great fit with the subject and drama, and agrees with and helps the overall tone.

 

I like it.

[Ozymandias]

Zool- thankya. *That* element was quite deliberately as you figured.

Tzim- sincerest apologies for the same thing. {:>\

[WrenWind]

Zool- thankya. *That* element was quite deliberately as you figured.

Tzim- sincerest apologies for the same thing. {:>\

 

 

it is perfect the way it is

 

perfect madness