Silver WInd Posted January 23, 2008 Report Posted January 23, 2008 (edited) Rose Heart Her blossoms await beneath the plain of ice pulsing in a splash of passion's crimson. A beating heart in the snowy caves where time passes eternal in stillness she waits. For a lover's kiss she patiently endures until she may bloom again in beauty new awakened. Edited January 30, 2008 by Silver Wind
Wyvern Posted January 30, 2008 Report Posted January 30, 2008 Nice poem, Silver Wind. :-) I really like the sensual imagery of the blossoms "pulsing... passion's crimson" in the first stanza, as it added to the tone of longing in the poem and contrasted with the icy setting in a very interesting manner. The one word of the poem that confused me a bit was "breath" in the second line of the first stanza, as the grammar there seems off and I couldn't envision the blossoms generating the ice when they seem to long to break free from it... was the word "beneath" intended there by any chance? Nice stuff, once again. :-) Thanks for sharing it here, Silver Wind.
Silver WInd Posted January 30, 2008 Author Report Posted January 30, 2008 Thank you very much, and yes you are right, I do not know what I was thinking when I did that
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