Kikuyu_Black_Paws Posted January 11, 2008 Report Posted January 11, 2008 When I listen you send goosebumps up my arms Initially you sound like a whisper, or a scream Now your cold visage slowly warms Deepens like dusk and turns to dusky cream Inside I can feel the goosebumps touch my heart Crawling through the forests like some creature of the dead And yet you glitter madeningly of love and hidden hate Not for seeking-- I pray you haven't come too late Silence fills the empty air in the gap that you have left Every sound is magnified by air and time and hardships Even the chimes stand silent and dare not move their lips Yes I wish to seek you, yes I wish to hold you Out of my fingers you fly and laugh your sweet beguile Under my gaze, though, I can see your smile.
Silver WInd Posted January 13, 2008 Report Posted January 13, 2008 Wow, what a clever idea, and very well done. The imagery was very vivid, and such great language used. I really enjoyed reading this.
Peredhil Posted January 13, 2008 Report Posted January 13, 2008 I really enjoy Acrostic poety Like this one I think you captured an essense Kept the imagery consistent Even gave me goosebumps Down my spine This was an excellent example of How to do this type of poetry I will point out in passing the the bible has many of these acrostics Since I'm into that sort of trivia
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