Kikuyu_Black_Paws Posted December 22, 2007 Report Posted December 22, 2007 Why, friends? Why are you fighting? Something went wrong but it's over nothing Why yell? Why raise your voices? You're here but I feel so alone. Is it? Is it any wonder? Why do I hide and dissolve into tears? You think- You think I am selfish But happiness can't be found there. Sometimes, Sometimes I feel so lost No one even remembers my name Longing I wish I were nothing To turn into ink and pages. That key That key is lost to me No person can become letters in a book I'll wait I'll wait for you again Return so that I can be free.
Elvina Posted December 23, 2007 Report Posted December 23, 2007 I liked the measure of this piece. It radiated hurt - I know that kind of hurt that only friends can inflict (knowingly or unknowingly). I didn't want to just read it and not leave a comment (I hate it when people do that to my stuff), but I don't have much else for you feedback-wise other than to say it was well written and I liked it.
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