Degorram Posted November 12, 2007 Report Posted November 12, 2007 (edited) I can't see past this crushing pain... It's slowly driving me insane. Why have you gone from me? I cannot breathe inside this box... You've got my heart in silver locks. Why have you gone from me? Your face is ever in my mind... And yet it's you I cannot find. Why have you gone from me? The feeling of your arms is here... But still you aren't really there. Why have you gone from me? The time is ticking slowly past... I do not think that I can last. Why have you gone from me? You've gone and with you goes my heart... You've had it from the very start. And still you will not come to me... Till your return I'll not be free. Why have you gone from me? Why have you gone from me? Edited November 12, 2007 by Degorram
Silver WInd Posted November 13, 2007 Report Posted November 13, 2007 I really like the way each stanza has its own rhyme I cannot breathe inside this box... You've got my heart in silver locks. Why have you gone from me? For some reason this one in particualr sticks out to me
Wyvern Posted November 16, 2007 Report Posted November 16, 2007 Bah, people can be so cruel to each other sometimes... :-( And a lot of the time, it has to do with people not being able to read each other's feelings, which makes misunderstandings inevitable. Or sometimes, people are just selfish and mean. I agree with Silver Wind that the line "I cannot breath inside this box" stood out, as did the line about time moving slowly... I think that both of those lines capture the feeling of yearning for a loved one well. Thanks for sharing this here, Degorram. We'll always be around to talk to if you need us.
Degorram Posted November 16, 2007 Author Report Posted November 16, 2007 Thank you all. The poem actually deserves some background, for, thankfully, I am not suffering any love-drama. I do have a pair of very good friends that I respect and love dearly, but will not be seeing them till April, and have seen them once since July. The poem applies to both of them. But thank you Wyv. I'll definitely take up your offer when I need it.
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