Da_Yog Posted November 7, 2007 Report Posted November 7, 2007 (edited) Hammer of a Dying Star Poetry is a ten pound sledge! Shattering the wall of deceit, the mind that restrains, the corpus of stagnation. It powders the mortar that binds us To the terminus of rigid forms, And pounds out the foundations of future thought. Poetry is a supernova! Consuming ancient thought in fiery catechism, Fomenting revolution in the depths of the void, Forging new elements, new ideas, new directions, Where before only zombies dared dwell. Edited November 7, 2007 by Da_Yog
Silver WInd Posted November 8, 2007 Report Posted November 8, 2007 I really loved the first stazana and the comparison of writer/poetry to architecture, and building the foundations of a building. Some unique imagery I thought It powders the mortar that binds us I loved this line. I really like the way the secound stanze was structured. And the first line Poetry is a supernova! I think really grabs the attention. And I loved this Where before only zombies dared dwell.
Da_Yog Posted November 8, 2007 Author Report Posted November 8, 2007 Poetry is a ten pound sledge! Shattering the wall of deceit, ᅟ the mind that restrains, ᅟ the corpus of stagnation. It powders the mortar that binds us To the terminus of rigid forms, And pounds out the foundations of future thought. Poetry is a supernova! Consuming ancient thought in fiery catechism, Fomenting revolution in the depths of the void, Forging new elements, ᅟ new ideas, ᅟ new directions, Where before only zombies dared dwell.
Da_Yog Posted November 8, 2007 Author Report Posted November 8, 2007 Woot, it worked. This is more how it is supposed to be presented. :-) Thanks for your comments as always Silver.
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