Silver WInd Posted October 13, 2007 Report Posted October 13, 2007 La Primavera Her eyes were shining with sweet light to see her smile was delight her silken skin seemed to glow bright she was a sight she was a sight Standing far beyond all reproach one feared to break her in approach upon her breast a silver broach dark would encroach dark would encroach With a look shadows she would slay with her it always feels like day dancing in the flowers of May love she would say love she would say So close your eyes and go to sleep never fear of have to weep through winter will begin to creep still she will leap still she will leap.
Parmenion Posted October 15, 2007 Report Posted October 15, 2007 Poem is badly punctuated, staggers in rhythm and overall is very forced. Curious as to why you used the spelling "broach" which is rarely used in this context, as opposed to "brooch". Regarding the actual point of the poem; I don't get it. Care to explain what its about?
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