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The Creeper

 

It is the creeper

as soon as it enters

the consciousness

it will settle upon the chest

slowly it steals the breath

gnaws upon fears, hopes, and dreams

a weight that tells you when it is there

you squirm and twist

trying to break free

wicked claws dig

into the skin

eating away inch by inch

it only grows

tail twisting round

acidity salivating

once begun

panic sets in

and your psyche thrashes

so the creeper feeds

growing fatter with every gnash

hungry, angry teeth

and a belly never full

the weight grows heavier

when you are near to break

do you defeat the creeper

or does the creeper

consume you?

Posted (edited)

If I was to guess I would say this poem is about depression manifested as some kind of monster.

 

Lines like:

 

"you squirm and twist" and

"and your psyche thrashes"

 

are an attempt by the protagonist or author to pawn off this depression as being a commonality to all. Otherwise the term "one" or "I" would be used instead of "you". The theme and manner in which this is written is quite clearly a search. It is search for an audience to identify with the "you" aspect in the poem and to "get" the vision of depression and its manifestation within the framework of the poem.

 

I found the poem poorly written about a common teenage topic tackled in an "abstract poetry" type manner that begs for credibility.

Edited by Parmenion
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