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The Darkness

Night
draws sleep
dreams will reap
silence descends
while somewhere one will weep
within the darkness time ascends
from the shadows images the mind bends
the moon alone left to glow ethereal light
while the silver rays weaves, fear it mends
a cold warmth to the soul it sends
twisted the vines shall creep
careful it tends
it will seep
in sleep
night.

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1 2 3 4 6 8 10 12 9 8 6 4 3 2 1

 

Almost perfect syllabic symmetry. I imagine that was rather difficult to pull off. I find the oscillation between comforting and disquieting imagery to be intriguing. It presents the darkness as something to be welcomed and feared at the same time. Very interesting.

 

I am curious about one thing though. Were lines 7 and 9 supposed to have the same syllable count, or was the symmetry supposed to be mostly visual? (I counted 10 syllables in line 7 and 9 syllables in line 9.)

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Thank you, yes I rather enjoy that kind of enterplay with the darkness

 

This is done in the style of Diatella, and the syllable cound should be:

 

1 2 3 4 6 8 10 12 10 8 6 4 3 2 1

 

Though it is possible I miscounted my syllabels within there somewhere

 

It is a diffcult style espcially with the added ryhme scheme to having to follow a syllabic structure

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