Silver WInd Posted August 17, 2007 Report Posted August 17, 2007 Opal Eyes The vines begin to choke for a heart that bleeds in thorns the poison slowly drips passing through the veins Breathing slowly the dragon's breath tarnishing around the edges truth is sought among the brambles Spoken is the word of silence rest not your weary souls lest the dreamscape swallow it up beyond the night of the raven The Raven Moon casts a shadow only the graveyard dance will uncover the mystery hidden beyond.
Wyvern Posted August 24, 2007 Report Posted August 24, 2007 "Greetingsss, one and all." Wyvern steps into the Banquet Hall wearing a plaid sports jacket that's too small for his scales, along with a fake set of wire rim glasses. "In order to fulfill the third clause in my bargain with Silver Wind, I shall now perform an almost dragonic response to her poem 'Opal Eyes.' Pleassse be seated to observe a master analyst at work." Wyvern claps his claws twice, and two lizardmen step in from a side door, pushing a rickety projector. They shove the projector next to Wyvern, then disperse as the reptilian Elder whistles and waves a claw in the air. Wyvern grins to the Banquet Hall audience, then flips on the projector so that it displays the first stanza of Silver Wind's poem. "Now..." Wyvern raises a gnarled stick as a pointer and points towards the vines of the first line. "As you can see, here we have some vines that choke, some thorns that bleed hearts, a bit o' the ol' poison, and a couple o' extra veins on the side. First thing one might think is 'this is some good imagery,' and they'd be right. But look clossser, and there's more here than meets the eye. You see, when you put the vines, the thorns, the bleeding heart, and the poison together, you get what could potentially be a great advertisement for a film... a preview for a multi-million geld blockbuster horror movie, entitled 'Attack of the Heart-Eating Thorny Poison Plants.' Throw in those extra veins on the side, and you can bet that the gore buffs will flock to see the feature presssentation. The poem gains sponsorship possibilities in this way, which increases its value and net worth as a poem." Wyvern clicks on the front of the projector, switching the image to a slide that shows the second stanza. "Moving right along, we see that in the second stanza, dragon's breath is referenced in a negative light. The breath comes out 'slowly' and is 'tarnishing' thingsss in general. Now, notice how after the breath is detailed, a certain 'truth is sought' in the brambles. This is a perfect example of a well-executed poetic advertising technique known as 'playing off of people's insecurity,' and is also a genius moment of subliminal advertising. After reading this poem, I'm certain that many dragons will go out and purchase Almost Dragonic Brand Minty Bramble Patch Balls in the hopesss of curing their bad breath. Bravo, Silver Wind, for the excellent poetic touch!" Wyvern clicks on the projector again, and nothing happens. He grumbles and shakes the projector until it displays an image of the third stanza of the poem. "In this third stanza, the reader is deliberately scolded in a powerful advertising technique made to rope people into attending the 'night of the raven' Summer party jam. According to the poem, thossse who don't attend the event are basssically letting their souls get swallowed up by a 'dreamscape' and ain't saying nothing relevant (hence the 'word of silence'). I only wish more info was given on the 'night of the raven' so that all the cool kids could get in attendence pronto, myssself included. Anyway, thisss stanza ultimately increassses the marketability of the poem by associating it to a popular event. And as we all know: marketability equals profitability equals better poem. It'sss the oldest equation in the book." Wyvern rattles the projector again, and continues shaking until several screws fall loose and it begins projecting an image of the fourth stanza. "Oh my, this is excellent." Wyvern traces his gnarled stick down the lines of the stanza. "Excellent indeed. In this final stanza, a hip new marketable trend is placed on display for the gullible youth to buy into. This 'graveyard dance' trend is bound to make a profit of thousands of geld in funeral CDs and Almost Dragonic Brand Light Tombstone Dancing Shoes. And notice how 'Raven Moon' isss capitalized to indicate product placement... Associating the 'graveyard dance' to 'Raven Moon' products isss a very wise decision, as it'll give the dance some credibility from the get-go and will also profit off of a healthy business relationship with 'Raven Moon.' You really outdid yourssself with this one, Silver Wind. A fine piece of work!" The projector breaks down as Wyvern lowers his stick and turns to the audience with a grin. "And so, in conclusion, 'Opal Eyes' is a great piece of work that measures in the multi-thousand geld value range. Even the title of the poem implies expensive material objects. I give this poem two claws up, and look forward to seeing what kind of profits it ultimately pulls in." ;-)
Silver WInd Posted August 24, 2007 Author Report Posted August 24, 2007 Thank you very much after reading that, well I must say despite the trouble you put me through for it, it was well worth the effort.
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