Silver WInd Posted August 13, 2007 Report Posted August 13, 2007 (edited) This is done in a form known as a Shadow Sonnet that was created by a poet frined of mine Loving You Forever I'm holding you forever never would I let you go never tender you kiss me I hold you tender eyes full of love I look you in the eyes sweet is my laughter for your words so sweet bound together we are forever bound hand clasped in your warmth you hold my hand you are my only one always I'm with you all that you are you are my one and all embrace me with your eternal embrace we stay together meant to be one are we whisper in my ear sweet whisper tempting me softly your eyes so tempting love you forever, you I always love Edited August 19, 2007 by Silver Wind
Regel Posted August 19, 2007 Report Posted August 19, 2007 A very interesting style of poem. I quite enjoyed it but I am not sure if I can explain why, but I'll try. I suppose the symmetry of the first word of the line being repeated as the last word of the same sentence tickled my curiosity and yet sounded very pleasing. It rang so true until the very last line of the poem "lover you forever, you I always love". It sounds and looks like a keystroke error. So in my mind it reads "love you forever, you I'll always love"
Silver WInd Posted August 19, 2007 Author Report Posted August 19, 2007 Thank you for catching that, I hate it when little things like that escape my notice, I shall go and fix it
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