purple_shadows Posted June 18, 2007 Report Posted June 18, 2007 (edited) My thoughts are twisted and tangled As I move from table to table Like naked bodies languid between the sheets Basking in the aftermath We are only what we appear to be I played dumb for you But now I acquist your bank of knowledge Forcefully And finally at peace Fall into a stoney sleep Edited June 20, 2007 by purple_shadows
reverie Posted June 18, 2007 Report Posted June 18, 2007 Not familiar with aquist? Did you mean acquit?
purple_shadows Posted June 20, 2007 Author Report Posted June 20, 2007 Not familiar with aquist? Did you mean acquit? actually, i meant acquist, but forgot the c. I have fixed it now
reverie Posted June 20, 2007 Report Posted June 20, 2007 (edited) oh, wow, that completely changes my reading of that line then. Hmm, I wish I could hear you read this. Then I could suggest some punctuation, because there seems to be a few possible ways you could read a few of the lines and depending how you read them, the meaning and emphasis could change. Edited June 20, 2007 by reverie
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