Canid Posted April 4, 2007 Report Posted April 4, 2007 (edited) I can't do precise movements I've tried and I've failed. The pen won't move smoothly my hand's looking ailed. There are more lines than letters on the pages before me and all of them wonky uneven and poorly. I've tried scoring the page to at least maintain size but the ink fills the lines and it doesn't disguise all the pen strokes that simply refuse to line up - and I'm forced to stop now for my hand's given up. Ow. I shall return! Edited June 30, 2014 by Canid
Wyvern Posted April 8, 2007 Report Posted April 8, 2007 Cute poem Canid. :-) I've never attempted to master a form of calligraphy, but I imagine that it'd be a difficult task and appreciate the humility of this poem. The one line in it that felt a bit off to me was the eighth line, "uneven and poorly," as the adverb "poorly" isn't modifying a verb there and feels out of place for that reason. You might consider finding an adjective that rhymes with "me" to take its place, or simply reworking both lines of that rhyme scheme into something different. Anyway, best of luck in your pursuit of Roman Rustic (a very nice title for the poem, by the way). Here's hoping that the pen strokes will start lining up with practice. :-)
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