EdenSinger Posted February 25, 2007 Report Posted February 25, 2007 Hello Peoples I am new, I've never posted any of my poems here before, so I don't know exactly how things work here.. and i understand there are some rules... or something? If i do or say something i am not supposed to, i apologize in advance and feel free to correct me.. Here are 3 poems I wrote, they are sort of related and were all inspired by nature and mother earth: poem no.1: Mer-May Poseidon whispers beckoning reach, of what I have come for; Mayn't sirens, gorgons dreaming, crash ashore and yet, freckle? Time, spilled whole Behind ocean drunk; I blue-dive so, in finite. Mightn't merging, not emerging merging, peel the world decent cloth? Mirrorship battered, on lead all... Reflected in order did I mind. Mustn't the shores washing like caressing, consider known-not, carry the tide? poem no.2: Ice Queen Ships of voices gone with breath, sleeping like the fair maiden shores. The one oracle of wind, motherest teach molten tides, torrents can freeze and erase... cornfields deep Goddess below, raying the skies, might we begin our vision a-new? Walkers of sleep, no doubt there, But I have spared a life somewhere, And what happened then, kindly, was you poem no.3: Mother, Play-ground From the sundown of Sunday, we sharpened our spears and sticks to play heavy over her beloved hands. Her cries might fill the air like a 'gull but our childishness cannot stand that there is such a realm un-reached, such a one we could not claim; Mother, we are not asking
reverie Posted February 25, 2007 Report Posted February 25, 2007 (edited) Ah a story teller in the guise of poet. Well, you've in good company. Looks like you want to write epic poetry or similarly long narratives poem. The epic poets speak for themselves: Homer, Virgel, Dante, Milton, even Pope. But, they're a hard act to follow. Try finding some good ballad writers from strong oral traditions to aspire too. Or folk songs. Like old old traditional ones, might help. Percy Granger symphonies!!! For a more contemporary approach try Seamus Heaney. But if you got more of romantic inclination then you can't go wrong with Coleridge's "The Rhyme of the Ancient Mariner." Edited February 25, 2007 by reverie
cryptomancer Posted February 26, 2007 Report Posted February 26, 2007 A Raven Lands on Edensinger's head and looks down at her in the quizzical manner of birds everywhere. "welcome" The raven's voice is a mellow caw reminicent of nails on a blackboard, "good to see you finally posted." I love them all on first reading, so good start, I gonna need time to sit and decipher them more later, and give a fuller thank you. Good to see you posting. *hugs*
Guest Phoenix Posted February 26, 2007 Report Posted February 26, 2007 YAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!! the Raven and EdenSinger are surrounded by a whirlpool-shaped flame which condenses into a bird manically trying to do cartwheels without dropping out of the sky. "ShecameShecameShecameShecameShecameShecameShecame!!!" She finally lands on EdenSingers shoulder, crooking her head at the raven on the way past, before rubbing up against the side of Eden's face while doing her best to grin. ************************************** good to see you here hon & i like these as much as i did the first time i read them *hugs*
EdenSinger Posted February 26, 2007 Author Report Posted February 26, 2007 (edited) EdenSinger tries to look up, to catch a glimpse of that dark beak... and she looks over on the one side too, to the other bird tickling her cheek.. and she smiles! With her eyes too. Thank you both!! You're making this exciting! Reverie, thanx for your feedback and for your suggestions - I will look them up. Epic poetry... does that include Alfred Lord Tennyson?? xox Edited February 26, 2007 by EdenSinger
reverie Posted February 26, 2007 Report Posted February 26, 2007 Don't know about Tennyson as much as I should. I think he always wanted to write an epic about king arthur, but never really got it going coherently. King Arthur's a hard topic 'cause it was already done even back then. I mean he's more like Shakespeare reinventing stories of the past, since Thomas Malory had already covered that ground. Which there is nothing wrong with that at all. By all means tear into him. I never met anyone that could write epic poetry, and probably never will. But if you're really looking for epic poets to read, well got 10 years? Check out wikipedia's list? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Epic_poems
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