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Whiskey Kiss

 

 

it was just a kiss

 

soft and tentative

one kiss

one taste

 

and I am

 

lost

in love

confused

happy

 

it was just a kiss

Edited by WrenWind
Posted

I enjoyed the book end comments "It was just a kiss"

 

It starts and ends the sentiment very well. In the middle the word choice seems very appropriate but if I might suggest one more to go with

 

 

and I am

 

lost

inlove

confused

happy

It would simply be "alive" :) Nice to see you writing again.

Posted

Whiskey Kiss

 

the bottle is still full

 

 

smooth liquid amber

one glass

one taste

 

and i am

 

lost

in love

confused

numb

 

 

the bottle is still full

 

 

 

 

 

a different twist

Posted

Kaw.

Krrrrrrrrraw.

 

Jemmy's apple's caught in his craw

but he don't sound quite like that.

He don't pick at the shingles.

He strips them off clean,

never dropped moss and mold

into my glass.

O Mary, mother of us all,

Send us a woman with warm lips,

Send us someone who won't shudder

at a crow.

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