Wyvern Posted October 16, 2006 Report Posted October 16, 2006 half-loved, half-lost, torn by alias. Severed, tacit shear of contact. pluralist schism : drowned by indifference. /join love within, /quit without weakness, to harm. whore words to profit, worlds apart. … leave the cause to be. The page cannot be displayed The page you are looking for is currently unavailable. Experience, the following: To take for granted, and believe they believe you believe. The undermining confidence that drains, distancing. A conscious decision. Disappointment turned imagined betrayal. Lost process, painful reach: a stretch under commitment. resentment, the invisible word that festers. Long drawn-out pain. Watching it fade in the universal torture of knowing. The time associated to interest. Elusive and embedded in those in reach, morphing to accessible terms. People past left past for people present. … more than half-lost. near-empty html, echoing hearts to silence
NickCall Posted October 16, 2006 Report Posted October 16, 2006 Very different. Kind of eerie, though. I like it. I guess I have an analogy for it: Like one of those Cafe' poetry sessions, but...online. An online cafe'? Needs a bongo drum But yeah, very different. Weilds a multitude of jargon, and that could be problematic to the meaning, otherwise, very cool.
Cerulean Posted October 20, 2006 Report Posted October 20, 2006 Hey Wyvie, When I stand back from this, like an impressionist painting, I get far more. As soon as I zoom in to a closer reading, the detail defeats me. Loved the whole, specially on an auditory level. Would love to hear you read this! Thanks for a cool, provocative poem. C.
Sparhawk Posted October 21, 2006 Report Posted October 21, 2006 umm... I know next to nothing about poetry really... but it sounds good I guess. Kind of an odd topic though
Ayshela Posted October 22, 2006 Report Posted October 22, 2006 ah, but often the most odd topics are the most fun! =)
Sparhawk Posted October 22, 2006 Report Posted October 22, 2006 Maybe. But I prefer the feeling I get when I write mine and when I think about who it's about.
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