sea vegetable Posted July 9, 2006 Report Posted July 9, 2006 (edited) Reaching out and open, I close my eyes to stifle the sense. I’m asking the night breeze for any scent of you. And up for offer, countless potions of earth and forest wines, Aromas of automotive oil and pavement, revived by a fresh city rain. Yet mixing in with the sadness of stale, lonely breaths, the most pungent my own, You escape me. Leaning in to the black of my memory, my nostrils flared for that herbal health, The sweet inhalation of passion and warmth on the nape of your neck. I wander, headlong, between the fine black hairs on your scalp Fresh with the perspiration of your joy, And faintly diluted hibiscus flowers. But in those rotting memories my probing still fails To breathe you in. From this cup, a fresh jasmine mist sways upwards Clutching for origins in the distant East. My palate disintegrates with the same effervescent futility Even for this drooping hound, a faint whiff cannot be caught in the stillness. I cradle a fleeting sense, in my hands the porcelain heat, As my nose grows cold. Familiar aerosols are biting into the back of my throat Deceptively alluding to meadows, but conjuring only suburban toilets. Outside, stagnant winter airs of chilled concrete and exhaust silence harakeke bushes. And giving up the struggle to remember any olfactory impression, I resign, exhaling a solitary gust over and behind my shoulder Sailing you further ahead of me. Just trying something here , please comment heaps.... seavegetable [imagine a really cool avatar picture here...pretty mean aye?!] Edited July 13, 2006 by sea vegetable
cryptomancer Posted July 22, 2006 Report Posted July 22, 2006 A Raven lands and looks at the poem. Ok, this is an interesting thing. I like the flow and feel of the poem very much, it is a interesting discriptive method, and the use of discribing smell is wonderful. I like the feel it gives to the searching, surroundings imaged in olfactory elegance. I do like. Write more.
cryptomancer Posted July 22, 2006 Report Posted July 22, 2006 Love the signature pic too, man it is fantastic, where you take that?
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