silentangel Posted July 2, 2006 Report Posted July 2, 2006 I don't normaly write poems but I wrote this one sometime ago and thought that I would share it. Please tell me what you all think If I don't love you, why won't my eyes leave you? If your just a friend , then why do I care? If I don't need you, then why do I cry? If I want to hold you, then why am I scared? If i want to be near you, why is it so hard? If I want you as mine, then why can't I share? The answer is easy, that much is now clear. The feelings are stronger, each time you are near.
ryurei Posted July 4, 2006 Report Posted July 4, 2006 This post touches my soul and reminds me of my relationship with a "Friend" (she's neither a GF or just a Friend) i truely like it:)
sea vegetable Posted July 9, 2006 Report Posted July 9, 2006 Yep. This is familiar. Its a more straight forward version of SEA SAW that i just posted. All those up and down left and right emotions and questions. I'd just say that the freestyle worked for me until there was a bit of rhymy-timey at the end. Maybe u didn't mean to, but if the reader is left with the last few lines to permiate, there is a rhyme there...that pattern doesn't seem to fit the rest of the piece. More importantly, good luck with maintaining the COURAGE pursuing the concept of UNCONDITIONAL LOVE. People so need to work on that (myself included).
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