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Not too shabby. I liked it :).

 

Just some suggestions.

 

Blood flows from my wounds,

My body becoming weak,

My strength and inspiration comes from,

Fighting for your defeat.

I found that to not be grammatically correct, so I thought that

 

 

Blood flows from my wounds,

My body becomes weak,

My strength comes from

Fighting for your defeat.

Would still flow as well.

I'm not quite sure how many syllables you were going for for each line. Good luck and keep it up :D

Edited by madhatter
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