Dont Start Your Fires With My Letters.

[Tasslehoff]

Dare Me To Walk Through This Fire

Burning My Heart & Soul.

Dare Me To Walk Through This Fire,

I Will Not Falter.

Dare Me To Walk Through This Fire,

What Will You Do When Im On Yourside?

Dare Me To Walk Through This Fire,

Dont Let Me Down.

Dare Me To Walk Through This Fire.

[Wyvern]

I think that the title of this poem is very interesting, but I didn't feel that the contents of the poem reflected it much. Structure-wise, the repetition of lines and colors struck me as similar to your "Rain" poem, though the spacing and connection to rain in that one was a little more appealing to the eye. I'm not quite certain what this poem is trying to say at the moment, as on one hand the narrator is asking for a dare while on the other he's asking to not be let down. I'm sure that there's a very complex and interesting set of emotions behind this piece, as powerful and ambivalence emotions have become a trademark of your recent poems, but you may want to draw them out a bit more here with some elaboration. Out of curiousity, what element do letters play in this poem?

 

Thanks for sharing this here. :-) It's always nice to see you posting, and I appreciate you posting these works and channeling your hardships into poetry,

[Tasslehoff]

I understand what your saying. The title & the poem really have no revalance. I actually like the smaller second *title* better. Passion Burns. Fits more, I feel. The original title I got from listening to a song by Hawthorne Heights, in which that is part of the chorus, & it was fitting at the time cause when I originally wrote this piece it was only 4 lines long & was part of a letter I was writing to someone. So, thats where the smal elemental connection comes from. Later I decided to extend the piece. I also agree it needs some work. I shall hopefully tackle that later this week. Hopefully I can get it to flow better, like "Rain"