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[Vlad]

I-

You are...

 

 

II-

Your form

conforms

to mine,

Our minds

combine

at once.

 

I meant

for a

Moment...

four

Moments...

for

Us.

 

 

III-

I dare

to wish,

To wish

to dream,

To dream

to dare

to hold

you close.

 

Close

my eyes

and

Hold

you close.

 

 

IV-

My words,

this World

Cannot tear

apart.

A part

of me

with you.

 

 

V-

When...

 

Whenever...

 

Forever...

 

With you-

Hold you-

Hold onto you,

and on

and on

and on

Forever, whenever.

 

 

VI-

Hey girl, I feel this way, but...

 

 

VI-

Hey, you know I like you, but...

 

 

VI-

Hey babe.

I love you.

 

And I never want to let go.

Edited March 1, 2006 by Vlad

[Sweetcherrie]

Lovely, it reads like two heartbeats that are in sync.

 

Just a question (and I might just have to read it a couple of times extra to see it), but why are the numbers there?

[Vlad]

The numbers serve to break up the poem into sections that are grouped thematically. In some of the sections, there is only a line, and in others there are a couple of stanzas; I didn't think the reader would pick up on hte groupings I wanted to create, and that the changes of topic might be too abrupt.

 

The other benefit to the numbers is that I got to repeat a single section multiple times, until the speaker gets it right, like section VI.

 

 

Thanks.