Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 14, 2005 Report Posted December 14, 2005 Where are you? I whisper in the darkness Where are you? You're acting so heartless. Who are you? Standing here before me Who are you? Why wont you let me in to see Open up to me My heart needs to unveil Open up to me And I will be your mail Where are you? When I am dejected Who are you? Making me feel so rejected Where are you? In your own concavity Who are you? Not talking to me Open up to me My heart needs to unveil Open up to me And you'll see, we will prevail
Peredhil Posted December 14, 2005 Report Posted December 14, 2005 I think this is one of your best so far. Good vocabulary, wistful yet meaningful questions, and an ending with hope.
Sweetcherrie Posted January 7, 2006 Report Posted January 7, 2006 Nice work hun and agreed with Peredhil...you're getting better with each poem you write
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