drummondo Posted December 2, 2005 Report Posted December 2, 2005 (edited) This is a song I've been working on for a couple of days. Jass (Beautiful Nightmare) helped a bit with the lyrics. The song's kinda for her, too There is a recording of it available at http://drummondo.dmusic.com I'm quite proud of the recording because it's probably the best quality recording that I've done, so give it a listen and let me know what you think I took a few of the repeats out of the lyrics to make it easier to read. Wishing Away I see you, hazy, glowing, Sitting across from me, I reach out slowly, knowing This is make believe. I analyse the lines That run between the stone, I watch the skies for signs That I'm not on my own. Just wish your life away, Upon each fading star, Until they find a way, To fall where you are, Wait another day, Watching from afar, Wishing life away, Every single day. You find yourself repeating Everyday, the same old lines, "I need you so much closer," I just can't reply, I go about my day Just thinking of your face, I need you with me, but You're in a different place. Just wish your life away, Upon each fading star, Until they find a way, To fall where you are, Wait another day, Watching from afar, Wishing life away, Every single day... I watch the skyline for a sign, Just waiting for the stars to shine, I'm feeling blinded all the time, Your skies are clouded, so are mine, Yeah, so are mine... Every single day. Edited December 2, 2005 by drummondo
reverie Posted December 4, 2005 Report Posted December 4, 2005 (edited) Very nice Drum... Very appropriate for the pop-rock genre... I particularly enjoyed the refrain, especially when the back up vocals start in on: Wait another day, Watching from afar, Wishing life away, Every single day. Also Just wish your life away, Upon each fading star Is just a great line. Reminds me of the work I did with Signe, way back when, on her Satellite Star theme. But, "wishing on a fading star" seems to capture it much better. Hmm, too bad, I never made that creative leap... Anyway cool line. Is easy to read as straight poetry too, since the naturally pleasing ballad stanza setup is used a lot. Though "I need you with me, but You're in a different place." Seems a touch cliche... but then again, I think most pop songs are by definition cliche and I myself am guilty of many, many cliches... Even so, I'd play around with that stanza some... cool tune, rev... Edited December 4, 2005 by reverie
Beautiful Nightmare Posted December 24, 2005 Report Posted December 24, 2005 You say your head is blurry But i cant get you out of mine. heh i love the finished off version very nice Happy christmas *hugs*
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