Petey Posted November 22, 2005 Report Posted November 22, 2005 Light through the clouds, and over the mountains, fire red and marigold yellow, the darkness runs, hiding until it is safe again. Cliffs awash in soft red, clouds seeded in deep yellow, the darkness returns, holding safe in locked chill.
Wyvern Posted December 3, 2005 Report Posted December 3, 2005 A very interesting poem, Petey. :-) I find the natural imagery of the piece quite striking, particularly in the uses of color in the sunset image of the second stanza. The personification of the darkness was also an interesting touch, and I like how he's a coward at sunrise and a controller at sunset. There seems to be something deeper in this poem, something related to the "locked chill" that signals the return of the darkness, but I can't quite put my finger on it. The dual nature of darkness also seems to hint at a larger meaning, though I'm not quite sure what that meaning might be. Is the personification of nature meant to allude to some human condition in the poem? "Clouds seeded in deep yellow" is an excellent image, by the way, probably my favorite in the piece. :-) Nicely done.
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