madhatter Posted September 7, 2005 Report Posted September 7, 2005 The old typewriter keys clang Ruffled paper shifted through Let alone ending with a bang Poet must finish before date due Mistakes of grammar and spelling were spaced and commonplace Reminiscent of coarse yelling The words were rude and crude The paper was done The poet had won But at what cost His skill was lost OOC: My first poem written in a long while. Since my last contribution to The Pen in fact. Er, it's a little rusty, so I'm very open to criticisms. In reality, the poem really did only take me 5 minutes, and the premise of the poem was based on the time it took me. Thanks in advance.
Tanuchan Posted September 7, 2005 Report Posted September 7, 2005 I like the poem, specially the first stanza. It made me remember the days when the typewriter was the only way to type my school papers (yeah, it tells my age, I know ). The sounds are all there - metallic and loud. Nicely summarized in a few lines. The last stanza broke the flow at first, but as I read and re-read, it started to blend in the general feeling again. It makes me think of a final glance at that paper from the typewriter, and frustrated poet muttering to himself. A nice work, madhatter. I hope we can read more of your poems . *hugs* ~Tanny
madhatter Posted September 7, 2005 Author Report Posted September 7, 2005 Hehe thank you Tanny for the war welcome and the encouragment. Yes, for the final stanza I was hoping to create a feeling of that frustrated and depleted poet. I'm glad it came out.
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