word_eyes Posted July 7, 2005 Report Posted July 7, 2005 funny how life collapses it almost traps us inside of who we are or who we pretend to be, and the shadow that it casts is massive darkening all that surrounds us including the path we walked to get to where we are, and every candle in front of you seems brighter than the next and you don't care where they lead as long as there's light where you believe you need to get, but they too will fade out, even the sun will become a black hole standing behind you and once you realize that you've created a sequence of nowhere, no one, and nothing you'll retrace your mistakes and chase them back to your shadow, and fade out too. Your shadow will live as your replacement with your name and your faces, and not even you will be able to tell the difference, because you too, were just an imitation.
Peredhil Posted July 8, 2005 Report Posted July 8, 2005 Nicely done. Odd resonance, there were times in my life where I felt like I was going through the motions of being me, an imitation of myself.
reverie Posted July 8, 2005 Report Posted July 8, 2005 (edited) So basically your saying, that when all of life's facades collaspe, then the shell that you wear is the shell that you will become... or something like that? i like this. rev... Edited July 8, 2005 by reverie
Wyvern Posted July 9, 2005 Report Posted July 9, 2005 I like this poem, word eyes. I find the uses of shadow imagery very evocative and original, and particularly like the notion of the shadow replacing the actual person. I also think that the ending of the poem is very effective in driving across the poems motifs, and I like how the poem naturally shifts into a second person perspective. On a minor side note, in case nobody has mentioned this over PM: please be sure to refer to the "One Thread a Day" Banquet Hall rule the next time you choose to post a large series of poems. Well done, once again.
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