Cerenza Posted May 31, 2005 Report Posted May 31, 2005 (edited) Alone I am Cold I remember a time when we used to smile.... I remember a time when we used to laugh. But no more... Why...? What happened to us? What made you hate me so? You changed... Without telling and without sharing. You just changed. I asked you why? But you never answered. You just ignored me and I suddenly felt so alone. When you changed, everyone else changed. I was frozen out, but you were still loved. I felt so alone... Time passed, and still no one could tell me why...Not even you... Why? So many questions that needs answering. So many words not worth repeating. I wish I knew what I had done... But I never will... You left this world and with you, you took the answer. Does anyone really know? Today we remembered you... I felt so alone. One thousand questions... Should I be here? Do I belong here? Would you want me here? I don`t know... But you do. But you can`t answer me... I will never know... I feel so cold. Cold inside. Cold on the outside. Will I ever get warm? No. Why should I? Your cold. Never to be warm. Why should I? I got a call at midnight. Cliche. But the news was not. You had an accident and to your death it lead. So many questions.... I`m so alone... I don`t know them,but I do... I know who they are, but not. I was never a part of you world. And I fear your death have only parted me more from her. She does not cry on my shoulder. Why would she? I have no comfort to give her. I don`t stand with them, crying, hugging. I stand on the outside. Alwayson the outside. It`s so cold. I`m so alone. Did you ever feel the same way? Are you cold now? Are you alone? So many questions...But there is no answer. Time goes, but sleep will not come. Food grows in my mouth... I though up. You can`t eat. Why sshouldI? So many questions that needs answering... I stand in a hall. It`s so big. I call, but there is no answer. They left. I am alone. I will alwaysbe alone... They remember...I don`t. They had good times, shared them with you. I did not. I am a stranger now. Was I ever known? So many questions...but there is no answer... I am cold. I am alone. ------- Copyrighted Cerenza 2005 Edited June 1, 2005 by Cerenza
Loki Wyrd Posted May 31, 2005 Report Posted May 31, 2005 I thought your use of repetition was very well done. I look forward to seeing more of your posts. May your future bring you warmer days.
reverie Posted May 31, 2005 Report Posted May 31, 2005 (edited) **lights a candle** Not much, but hope it helps warm some of that frozen solitude of yours... Other, than a few minor typo's around the middle towards the end.... i say, this was done well. In other words, I thought the questions rang true... Cool, now go find so warmth, before you freeze to death... rev... Edited May 31, 2005 by reverie
Cerenza Posted May 31, 2005 Author Report Posted May 31, 2005 (edited) Thank you all for your kind replys. Typos are a bad thing, but unfortunatly my native tung is not english.. I wrote it last night. I was sitting here inforn of my PC just thinking. I coul`nt sleep.. as usual. It`s in rememberence of a friend of mine who died in a car accident. Or rather a Trailer accident on sunday. She did`nt get to reach her 20th birthday. As you probobly can tell by the poem, we were not friends at the end...witch is why I guess I`m taking it harder than I would have maby, if we were just never friends. But we were friends once. Good friends. And then she died. And all the answers died with her. Her sudden death made me realise that we really don`t know what tomarrow brings us. Malin 27.09.1985 - 29.05.2005 Requiescat in Pacem Edited May 31, 2005 by Cerenza
Sweetcherrie Posted June 1, 2005 Report Posted June 1, 2005 Even with typos this was a very sensitive poem (and don't worry there are more people here that aren't native english speakers ) and I hope you will feel a bit less lonely in the company of so many warm and loving people here at the Pen, welcome. *huggles warmly*
Cerenza Posted June 1, 2005 Author Report Posted June 1, 2005 Even with typos this was a very sensitive poem (and don't worry there are more people here that aren't native english speakers ) and I hope you will feel a bit less lonely in the company of so many warm and loving people here at the Pen, welcome. *huggles warmly* Thank you I`m starting to like it here allready
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