Arashi Posted May 12, 2005 Report Posted May 12, 2005 (edited) Well, finally, I am back to writing more poems. Recently I have been stretching my artistic creativity really thin by trying to keep up on writing poems, writing a new book entitled "Psychotican, drawing a comic thats in my head(which in turn has me working a lot of the time on trying to devolp my own style, instead of copying others.), my photography class which has me taking pictures AND making a movie to the old slink radio comercial jingle thingy, and trying to get a painting out every now and then for some more things. I will find it amazing if, by the end of all of this, I have sanity left over to function normally in society. When I am done with the first chapter I will post it..... _____________________________ Void Darkness That which fills mine eyes When I think of your mournful face Whisper to me your worries and fears And in the twilight I shall kiss away your tears Listen to the beat of my heart Whilst I hold you tightly in mine arms Oh goddess, beautiful and weeping Give to me your delicate hand and lay with me Let us close our eyes and drift Slowly from the unfamiliar to the ever familiar Darkness *Edited thank to Peredhil* Edited May 15, 2005 by Arashi
Peredhil Posted May 13, 2005 Report Posted May 13, 2005 I like this somber tender piece. I found myself mentally transposing one line, "Oh goddess, beautiful and weeping" but I don't know why, so as a suggestion it would be suspect. Wlecome back.
Arashi Posted May 15, 2005 Author Report Posted May 15, 2005 I am glad to be back. And I think I do like it better the way you have it. That line was irking me for a while.
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