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Please remind me

Remind me that you care

Care what happens

Care who I am

To you

About what can be

 

Please remind me

Remind me that I care

Care what happens

Care who you are

To me

About what might be

 

Please remind me

Remind me that caring

Should be enough

Enough for you

And me

Care about what might never be

 

Please forget me

Forget that I cared

Cared what happened

Cared who I was

To you

About what could have been

 

I’ll forget you

Forget that you cared

Cared what happened

Cared who you were

To me

About what will never be

 

And my tears slowly flow

When I realise that you must have been

 

….a dream

Posted

Caring alone is never enough. Care enough to call and say hello. Care enough to visit and spend some time. Care enough to stand up and speak your mind (even if you know it's not a popular position). "I care but I did nothing." what a confusing message. I care Sweetcherrie enough to acknowledge that this was an emotional poem and a true friend is someone you don't have to explain this to. They are just there.

Posted (edited)

This poem makes me feel emotional in a very quiet sort of way. While it isn't charged with heavy words, and vivid images, it brings a very deep sort of feeling inside of me.

 

I like the structure, and the way the poem is set up. It feels like the person is enduring a sort of misappropriated relationship, and we get to see his/her apathy in a chronological set of happenings. I think that's what makes it so...emotionally far away, yet all strong and stuff.

 

I dig it, truly. Good stuff.

Edited by Bboy
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