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[NightFae]

I see the children pointing

I hear their mocking laughter

It's hard to think they're children

With hearts so dark and cold

 

You'd tell me I was dreaming

That they were laughing with me

They can't be laughing with you

If you're not laughing too

[Peredhil]

For a very long time, I've thought children were wolves, but then I met Canid here at the Pen, and I realized that I was maligning wolves.

 

Some people seems to think that children are little bundles of joy and perfection that are twisted and corrupted by society. The Tarzan syndrome, noble savages.

I tend to think that children who are forced to raise themselves most often turn out like characters in the Lord of the Flies.

 

Hmph. I set out to say this was a good poem, but apparently you struck a chord within me.

[Alaeha]

*Nods* Most of the kids I knew in grade school were nasty little buggers. If I acted now as they did then, I'd be a good deal shorter and an entirely different hue due to chronic acts of violence.

 

On a side note: No need to apologize or note the time at which you wrote the poem. If you're terribly insecure about your writing at 3 AM, run it through a spellchecker. (I recommend doing so anyway, regardless of when you wrote it.) Otherwise it doesn't matter.

 

Of course, if you were horribly dissatisfied with the piece, you could post it in the workshop.

 

Abbreviated version: I read it. It's good.

[Curious Mylo]

I like it.

 

If I could write that good at 3AM... a lot of what I write would be better.