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Kissed by soothing dreams

asleep with eyes wide open

 

The man in front force-feeds

on monotonic tone

the knowledge to defeat

the rising of the dawn

 

Yet, time just clocks along

lost in my waking dreams

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Waking dreams are my favorite kind.

 

My only constructive advice is that possible you may want to try to reinvent your second line to become something more fresh and uniquely you.

 

Thanks for sharing. :)

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