drummondo Posted March 15, 2005 Report Posted March 15, 2005 Follow the rhymes... Sepia Sepia Seeping through photographs. Weeping at memories Keeping the cemetaries Filling with epitaphs. Shrilling alarms Slowly following felonies, Folding 'long' arms Out of time with the melody, Scalding their palms With the heat of the ropes That they tighten With strength unenlightened, Just hoping they might Understand all the writings, Joking that 'right' is An ownable item, Don't run inside To escape from the light when You know all it takes Is to open the curtains. Fading farces, Arson aided by Red pigmentation; The colour of flame Will wane in time, As memories wilt, And curl, and die In fire. Ink spilt, And time remains. Sepia Stains just like blood, Given time. Instant history, Orange and mud, Unattainable mystery, Misunderstood. Hidden crime; Given time, Would you show all the lies That you should? There's deceit in those proud dreams, So keep all your memories, Nothing but crowd scenes, Now creeping with enemies.
Loki Wyrd Posted March 17, 2005 Report Posted March 17, 2005 A very clever piece, I enjoyed reading it. May I ask why you chose to use italics for the whole thing? If I may, feel free to answer.
drummondo Posted March 18, 2005 Author Report Posted March 18, 2005 Italics? That's just what I do I find it easier for people to differentiate from the blurb and the poem if I place the poem in italics. That way, you can tell where my introduction ends and the poem actually begins. It doesn't affect the piece at all, I prefer to use other methods for that, like the odd bold word, or by de-italicising it
Ayshela Posted March 18, 2005 Report Posted March 18, 2005 *g* which i usually do in reverse - comments in italics and poem in regular type.
Vlad Posted March 22, 2005 Report Posted March 22, 2005 This reminds me of a poem I once read... "Nothing but Grays" I believe it was. Now I have to go find it again! I thought that the rhyming in the first stanza was excelent, but unfortunately the rest of the poem dissapointed me slightly in that respect. The imperfect rhymes within were refreshing, and the contrast provided between (what I understood to be) the past and the future is enlightening. I'm going to have to start reading more of you. =)
Loki Wyrd Posted March 23, 2005 Report Posted March 23, 2005 I think I actually prefer the second stanza's rhyme to the first. The first stanza's rhyming works great to start with, and used for a short time, but it would have driven me mad if the whole thing had been that way.
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