Loki Wyrd Posted February 10, 2005 Report Posted February 10, 2005 (edited) Drowning out all thought Even the written word My focus is lost To entertain the absurd Life being so In my state of mind The only way through At the end of the line Waiting Falling Contorting my mouth Into a smile That's flagrantly real A plea of denial The eager fool My own abomination Fraught with peril Sharp as the imagination Crippling me Edited February 11, 2005 by Loki Wyrd
reverie Posted February 12, 2005 Report Posted February 12, 2005 i like it... kinda of stream of conscience, but not really... rev...
sleepless Posted February 14, 2005 Report Posted February 14, 2005 (edited) That's rather nice Loki The "Contorting my mouth..... " part stood out in particular, and it's a pretty neat way to carry the poem forwards by employing one word lines. Not absolutely sure about the title though. 'Where I am' gives me the impression of something slightly more static than motion the poem suggests. Great job though. Edited February 14, 2005 by sleepless
Loki Wyrd Posted February 14, 2005 Author Report Posted February 14, 2005 Oh, that's not the title. Most of my poems don't have titles, so I just make up something to post. Glad you liked it.
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