Tattered Posted February 4, 2005 Report Posted February 4, 2005 This is just raw...I have to make it into something...but I am not sure how yet...it's just too fresh. Any suggestions are appreciated. It’s a twisted game you play Everything you feel today, you felt it before You know it well You live in your own personal hell It’s about control Or lack thereof It’s about self respect You haven’t got that yet You push and pull away Like a daring trapeze act You walk a fine line Just to see how you get back this time It’s like a rollercoaster ride Cheap thrills give you your high And you lows It’s addict behavior …I know it well I’ve just never been quite here before I guess I said some things you didn’t want to hear Maybe I was right or maybe I was wrong But I think the truth lies inside yourself You already knew, you already know Once you decided to let us go Once that drink hit your lips You left me, you left me We were as good as done You say you love me but I know you don’t I hope you find that one you need The one you have always loved deep inside The one you haven’t found The one you have spent your whole life searching for That one is you Yes I think that’s what you need to do You can’t even see yourself It’s hard to do I can’t tell right now if the person that you are Is more the one searching some street of a nameless town Looking for a party and fresh prey Or that man in a suit and tie At church on time every Sunday You don’t even know the games you play But I do I do I can see right through you Don’t think I don’t understand Don’t think I am not being fair I know enough to see the good in you Complicated, anguished life of a torn man I know you can make it you can do this thing Called happiness It starts inside Heal the damage from past fires Let the scars go away Stop playing with the flames that got you there You can’t even see yourself I bought some pillows and blankets today I feel so cold You left me here in the cheapest way I have to say I feel so cold today You cheated yourself, you lost at your own game And you've been playing it so long You may wonder why you can't win But it's a losing game...everyone loses NO one ever wins I got caught in the middle And I am glad I got to see I am glad you revealed this part of you to me At least I know now And I don't have to wait anymore I don't need to say I told you so You already know I said we'd be standing here Just like this, one day So here we are Good luck on your way.
Ayshela Posted February 6, 2005 Report Posted February 6, 2005 wow. you've such a lot, here.. such a lot of raw stuff, powerful stuff. such a lot of strength, courage, endurace, too. critical feedback - i'd have to "live with it" a bit before i could be at all helpful beyond that personally, i'd split the second line at the comma. There's always so much heart in what you have to say, i don't want to rush with it. Let me think a bit. *hugs*
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