Suicide

[Sweetcherrie]

Suicide

 

Sweet sorrow silently settles

Slowly seeping into my soul

 

Darkness deepens

Drowning thoughts

And dreams die

 

Endless emotions emerge

Cowering conscience collides with pride

Foully flooding felicity

Leaving feelings loaded with lies

 

I ponder on passionate prayers

Please make my wrongs right

 

Alas time took that option

And faithful regret has arrived

 

Pain pierces my heart in unknown hurt

For I am left with only one word:

 

Why?

Edited January 23, 2005 by Sweetcherrie

[Sweetcherrie]

After reading and rereading Should I post from Peredhil, I found the courage to post this.

 

Please be nice.....

[Peredhil]

Up front since you'd expressed a concerned over English -

A "hart" is a deer, I think you wanted "heart" instead, which is traditionally the seat of emotion.

That said, the rest of the English is fine.

 

The way it is written is very well done! The use of alliteration (repeated sounds) builds the emotion and sweeps the reader through what could be difficult passage "stopping points".

 

The feelings expressed are conveyed very well. If you search through the Banquet Hall, you'll find that you are not alone in what you feel or have felt. Every person's pain is unique to them, but you should find understanding, not condemnation.

 

The answer? I can only give you big warm huggles at this point, and tell you that personally I'm very happy you DID survive to come to us at the Pen.

 

Hugs

[Sweetcherrie]

Thank you for pointing that out because I really didn't want to talk about a deer in that particular part.

 

Hugs back

[Ayshela]

probably the one question i ask most often, and in the most contexts.

sometimes it's answerable.

sometimes... i have to keep digging in hopes of finding answer.

 

Quite alliterative, though well done - it never seems forced.

Welcome. You're in good company here, and here you might find yourself startlingly well understood.

 

*hugs*