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Wouldn't it be nice..

to have your own ear listening,

to hear someone responding,

like you would?

 

Wouldn't it be nice..

to tell your life's story,

like you listened to others,

telling theirs to you?

 

Wouldn't it be nice..

to know someone like yourself,

who's actually interested,

and understands the awkward moments?

 

Wouldn't that be nice...

 

 

[23 januari 2005, Leverkusen]

Edited by Appy
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PS: [03:44] Appy: it's a flimsy angsty thing, but the first i've written in ages heh

 

Be nice, please? ^_^

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sighs

 

I often wonder how it would be to look at myself trough someone else's eyes.

 

To me this poem tells me to try and understand other people and put myself in their shoes.

That way preventing to hurt them, even if unintentionally, by knowing exactly what to say and when.

 

I absolutely love it, in fact I am gonna write it down and pin it to my wall as a reminder that people are unique and each thinks in their own unique way.

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Hugs Appy

 

I don't pretend to understand your particular pain, but I my heart echoes yours.

 

You know that you always have a place in my inbox. I may not understand, but I always accept and cherish.

 

-Peredhil

Posted (edited)

*sighs* I think it would be very nice Appy...

 

...of course then again,if you found another you out there, could you bear what you heard?

 

 

It's a very nice poem though, I like it.

 

 

 

*side note* You could just as easily end the poem with repetition of the first line minus the "that." Not sure, though if doing so would throw off any of your intended effects. Still, I think either works; just high-lighting an option I see.

 

 

 

revery

the dreamlost

"And wouldn’t it be nice to live together

In the kind of world where we belong..." (beach boys/wouldn't it be nice)

the dream continues...

Edited by reverie
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PS: [03:44] Appy: it's a flimsy angsty thing, but the first i've written in ages heh

 

Be nice, please? ^_^

Dear dear appy, it's hrd not to be nice in my comments when your poem echoes what (I believe) most people would feel...sometimes i feel i listen too much to others and no one listens to me, so your poem struck a chord in me =]
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