Loki Wyrd Posted January 16, 2005 Report Posted January 16, 2005 (edited) "Life is running out of reasons," Mutters the man with matters That he just can't relate To the conventions of life: Accomplished in seasons, But better with days; And often best looking at night. "It's easier than falling asleep," To be taken seriously, Should ask for a second opinion. Long and lasting, I feel like I should move, As the moving means I'm living; Everything else is to be asleep, Riding the invisible rails. "I need more information for a spaceship," Picturing it in the backyard: It would go nicely with the garden. When I heard footsteps my walking ceased, The rest still out there, Like raindrops in the sky; Falling, despite the weather's calm. Not suitable for flying Means to stay where you are. Edited January 16, 2005 by Loki Wyrd
Wyvern Posted January 16, 2005 Report Posted January 16, 2005 I like this poem/series of poems a lot, Loki Wyrd. The manner that you create interpretations and thoughts revolving around the quotes is very intriguing, as is the manner that you create specific scenarios pertaining to them. I especially liked the reference to the "invisible rails" that contrast with physical movement in the second piece, as well as the imperfect rhyme of "life" and "night" that seemed to bring the first piece to a powerful close. Great stuff.
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