reverie Posted November 3, 2004 Report Posted November 3, 2004 (edited) Imperial blues Dispair is discovering your fears manifested in the dreams of others. Sorrow is seeing those dreams come true… The Selfish Empire Florishes So send out the heralds of indignation -And let the horn of abandon blow fierce As we bow before the fury imperium And no ire but its own will be let to prosper ~confounded: Anger extrensic must confirm righteous it must? It must... revery the dreamlost "strike a light..." the dream continues... Edited November 3, 2004 by reverie
Gyrfalcon Posted November 4, 2004 Report Posted November 4, 2004 Congratulations reverie on a good poem and a distinct lack of weenie-ness.
reverie Posted November 4, 2004 Author Report Posted November 4, 2004 (edited) decided to edit it some... Imperial blues Dispair is discovering your fears manifested in the dreams of others. Sorrow is seeing those dreams come true… The Selfish Empire Florishes So send out the heralds of indignation -And let the horn of abandon blow fierce As we bow before the fury imperium And no ire but its own will be let to prosper Extrensic anger must confirm righteous ~confounded: it must? It must... rev... Edited November 4, 2004 by reverie
Appy Posted November 5, 2004 Report Posted November 5, 2004 (edited) well done editing this. The : after counfounded in the first draft annoyed me, now it's obvious. *nods* once my brain comes around again I like the message, and how you dealt with it. Although I had to look up certain words on dictionary.com It feels regal and.. and huge, like the story of a far-away country.... though my feelings are quite strange as of late heh... Certainly worthy of a weenie removal PS: write (or post) more pls PPS: it's extrinsic btw, according to afore mentioned site... dialect maybe? Edited November 5, 2004 by Appy
reverie Posted April 22, 2005 Author Report Posted April 22, 2005 (edited) Imperial blues © (Edited April 22, 2005) “Despair is discovering your fears manifested in the dreams of others.” “Sorrow is seeing those dreams come to fruition…” The Selfish Empire Flourishes So send out the heralds of indignation -And let the horn of abandon blow fierce As we bow before the fury imperium And no ire but its own will be let to prosper Extrinsic anger must confirm righteous ~confounded: it must? It must… Edited April 22, 2005 by reverie
reverie Posted April 25, 2005 Author Report Posted April 25, 2005 (edited) I wonder if it looks better this way??? Imperial blues © (Variation 04/25/2005) “Despair is discovering your fears manifested in the dreams of others.” “Sorrow is seeing those dreams come to fruition…” The Selfish Empire Flourishes So send out the heralds of indignation -And let the horn of abandon blow fierce As we bow before the fury imperium And no ire but its own will be let to prosper For, the furor must confer righteous. it must... Edited April 25, 2005 by reverie
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