WrenWind Posted October 28, 2004 Report Posted October 28, 2004 Gwaihir You'll find him in the garden Muddy knees and green fingertips Coaxing the cabbage to grow and learn Wiggly, giggly cabbages dance when he is near A party of splendor attended by all Self conscious and out of his element and a little underdressed Umm Hello! He trips, falls and hopes no damages are caused. Visions of cake flying everywhere haunt him Yet follow him quietly into the woods and you will see Total transformation, Listen and learn Trees and small plants lean close to him They know he will listen to the tales that they tell. Rapt attention to the flora and fauna of this wood He tends to their needs and they flourish and grow A smile of contentment glows on his face Partly hidden by the smudge of loam :wigglycabbage:
Wyvern Posted December 7, 2004 Report Posted December 7, 2004 I thought that this Writing Exchange poem presented a very fun and accurate depiction of the Gwaihir's character, Wrenwind, and found it a clever and entertaining read. I particularly like your uses of details, such as the "green fingertips" and the "smudge of foam" attributed to Gwaihir's gardening and partying. Your incorporation of dialogue with the "Umm Hello!" in the second stanza was also very sweet, and I thought it captured his clumsy essence well. Nicely written, well done.
Gwaihir Posted December 7, 2004 Report Posted December 7, 2004 I can't imagine why I didn't comment on this earlier. A lovely poem and a fun read, thank you!
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