AuroraAoD Posted October 23, 2004 Report Posted October 23, 2004 "The Voices" Sometimes at night When I'm lying in bed I can hear voices Inside my head Sometimes they're faint Ever so small Sometimes so quiet I can barely hear them at all Other times though They talk so loud It's like trying to hear a whisper Over the roar of a crowd Sometimes there's one voice Sometimes there's two At times there are so many I don't know what to do They only like to visit When I'm sitting alone When it's nice and quiet And when I'm resting at home They don't like to come out During the day When there's a lot of people around And they can't have their say Although I'll admit They are helpful at times When I need some help on work And I'm falling behind They can be really creative And ever so smart When it comes to things like Drama Literature and Art And sometimes it's nice To not be alone With noone to talk to All on my own But as much as I love The conversations we have Can we please not have them Right before I go to bed
Ayshela Posted October 23, 2004 Report Posted October 23, 2004 *laughs understandingly* ain't that the truth!!! *hugs*
AuroraAoD Posted October 24, 2004 Author Report Posted October 24, 2004 "Organization of the Mind" Childhood memoiries go in the filing cabinet on the right. Fears and uncertainties are locked in the vault. Ideas and inventions go in the outgoing box. Inspiration goes in the ingoing box. Lost thoughts are deposited in the Lost and Found bin near the wall. Facts and dates are filed in the top right drawer of the desk. Birthdays, anniversaries, and deadlines are recorded on the calendar by the door. Images are categorized and filed in the second and third filing cabinets. Questions are organized in the second and third left hand drawers of the desk. Quotes are alphabatized and arranged on the bookshelves. The maid dusts every Tuesday and Thursday. Vacuuming is every Wednesday. An organized mind is a Happy mind!
cryptomancer Posted October 24, 2004 Report Posted October 24, 2004 Voices are fun, just dont name them. *grins*
Mynx Posted October 24, 2004 Report Posted October 24, 2004 Mynx appears to read the works and replies, before nodding emphatically. She opens her mouth to speak a reply, but instead staggers forward as something small, brown and furry hits her in the back of the head. Supressing a feline growl, she hefts her scythe and begins to chase after the cackling squirrel, leaping out of a nearby window in the ever graceful movement of a cat as she pursues the evil beast. [OOC: Don't name them, yes. And never personify them]
Gryphon Posted November 23, 2004 Report Posted November 23, 2004 Gryphon surveys the shambles that is his own mind: To the left are the shards of a shattered story, left where they fell in the hope they might one day reassemble themselves into a story worth telling. Under the bed a dusty pile of dates that should be pinned to the calendar... The calendar still showing a date 3 months ago because it's got a pretty picture. A jumble of memories and feelings litter various shelves. Quotes in a hat in the corner, ready to be drawn out at random... very, very random. The maid refuses to dust claiming "This place is a bio-hazard." The dustbunnies turned feral and ate the vaccum. Small wonder I have such a time getting things done. <_<
Salinye Posted November 24, 2004 Report Posted November 24, 2004 I really liked this poem. I recently was a doula at a birth for a woman who is schitzophrenic (sp?) I also have a cousin diagnosed with the same illness. I really feel for them. But that's a different story altogether. I really loved the humor of the end. If I was to suggest anything for change, it would be that throughout the entire poem you had a BD rhyme scheme, but on the last stanza you didn't. However, I love this: Can we please not have them Right before I go to bed That is such a cute twist. My only suggestion would be to change line B of the last stanza to end with a ryhyme for Bed to stay with your form. It's a GREAT poem and oh too true! I always tell my husband: "I had the hardest time getting to sleep last night, I couldn't turn my brain off!" lol I HATE THAT! Great job! Thank you for sharing! ~Salinye
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