Regel Posted October 18, 2004 Report Posted October 18, 2004 Easily the fittest man I ever knew, His age was sixty five, Grandfather friend and father too, Stunned disbelief he’s not alive. His smile and warmth will linger on In memories handled fondly We’ll remember Ron’s compassion And his steadfast love for family. Checked himself in for surgery, Among the simplest of operations, Sounds just like a very bad joke, He died of complications.
Regel Posted October 18, 2004 Author Report Posted October 18, 2004 Thank you to which ever elder fixed the multiple posts.
Ayshela Posted October 18, 2004 Report Posted October 18, 2004 ouch. i'm sorry, Regel. "in memories handled fondly" - i like that. nice.
drummondo Posted October 18, 2004 Report Posted October 18, 2004 I think I gave you all or most of my comments on IRC last night, but here's a summary anyway. It's easily one of the most heart-felt poems I've read in a long time, but it also reminds me of war poetry in that it shows almost satirical contempt; the war poets used to show their resentment of war through satire and cynicism, and the way you end this piece shows contempt for the health system, or something. It's very touching. The layout, as I said, is interesting. Stanza one concentrates on your relationship with the guy, stanza two is almost like a eulogy, and would be the part at which I would cry if I had any emotion at all, and stanza three shows the aforementioned satirical contempt for the health system. I think I may be alone with this one, but I took a lot from simply the first and last lines: "Easily the fittest man I ever knew, He died of complications." This perfectly demonstrates how fragile we all are, and gave me a lot of perspective in a way. Anyway, this was brilliantly written and very touching. I have no doubt it would've made the guy proud.
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