_Zen_ Posted October 2, 2004 Report Posted October 2, 2004 i could never be sure about love always had a practical mind i've liked some people before but it feels different this time people talk about love so many stories we've heard didnt hold any water until she looked at me and said those 3 words i couldnt even react to it all i could do was believe all i could do was feel my heart swelling without reprieve and i was filled with a send of joy i find it hard to explain but im sure you'd have seen me grinning ear to ear on that day and maybe some doubts of mine could finally be put aside love cant be such a bad thing if it gives you that sense of pride.
reverie Posted October 6, 2004 Report Posted October 6, 2004 narrative style seems to be your thing. I think Essays / journal type things could help you develop more... just a thought... I hear the lyric quality too. Simple is the rhyme scheme, but it makes for song-like flow... I can hear a singer's voice in it... The statement then explanation/reflection form of the majority of your couplets works well with the song form too... neat rev...
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