drummondo Posted April 16, 2005 Report Posted April 16, 2005 When time comes and touches your life, And leaves in an instant, you'll know In the blink of her eye, And the softness of skin As your hands move apart; It was worth it.
dragonqueen Posted April 17, 2005 Report Posted April 17, 2005 This isn't the most recent line, but whatever. It was instant inspiration, especially since this is something I' ve sort of been meaning to write for a while. The only thing that bothers me is the ending, which was revised a million times. Hordes of emotion attacking the soul, Defenseless and hurt. Dying at my own hand. Fear, anger, hurt Eating way from the inside out. Inescapable hurt. Closing my eyes but it's still there, This hurt. Hordes of emotions raging within Hurt too much To be contained in one body A new line(one that I've sort of been messing around with) : Flamingoes cry pink tears.
cryptomancer Posted April 30, 2005 Author Report Posted April 30, 2005 (edited) Flamingoes cry pink tears, The blue birds sing 'Purple Rain' I was once blest by a peacock, And danced in the colours again. I drifted in the shadows of sunlight, Found my place in the silver shade, Amidst the ripples of saltflats, And the desert of a meadow glade. Lost in the company of friends, Recognised in the crowds of strangers, Dancing to 'Purple Rain' Her tears wet upon my shoulders. Line: 'Did ever a breeze dry my eyes' Edited April 30, 2005 by cryptomancer
cryptomancer Posted April 30, 2005 Author Report Posted April 30, 2005 When Time comes and touches your life, Each second counted in the soft shift of her hair, A slow drift of sweet memory, Kisses of her lips mark hours, Yet in seconds are gone, Her embrace could last for years, Time never allows so long. Moments measured, often stolen, Each precious drop if liquid sand Flowing for her. Blood in my heart's beating life, Her love the measure, Her time, my life.
epinephrine Posted April 30, 2005 Report Posted April 30, 2005 Did ever a breeze dry my eyes... Did ever a breeze dry my eyes, It was the wind of kinship. Did ever a sound stop my heart, It was a word of intimacy. When a light washed clean the darkness, It was your kindness that awoke my eyes. And when that time comes, I trust, It will be your hand in mine, Your voice to guide. Hmmm. That came out a little deeper than I had anticipated. Well here's a new first line anyway: "This is more than I hoped" -epinephrine
Mynx Posted April 30, 2005 Report Posted April 30, 2005 This is more than I'd hoped for But not less than I'd dreamed To think they'd allow For you to see me This is less than I asked for So much more than I wished The joy that I felt When we shared our first kiss This is more than I'd hoped for Your hand wrapped in mine Lifebond everlasting Surviving through Time. New line - Show me you're not afraid
cryptomancer Posted April 30, 2005 Author Report Posted April 30, 2005 (edited) Show me you're not afraid As with each moment falls, Casting its shadow in the glass, Half full, Time stealing seconds, Each moment a blessing, Smiles of our time alone Kissing the mind with hope. Show me you're not afraid, As with the soft beating, each moment passes, fleeting, upon our treasured days, I long to again find you, Let my arms entwine you, captured and unafraid. Lines: Echoes of forgotten dreams. Edited May 1, 2005 by cryptomancer
Yuki Kokoro Posted May 3, 2005 Report Posted May 3, 2005 Echoes of forgotten dreams bounce and clatter in my mind tumbling through old memories shredding perceptions of time And though it seems just yesterday yet oh so many years ago that I was here last, writing here last What a long strange trip it's been Last line copywrite of Grateful Dead, but somehow it really seemed like it belonged there, so I borrowed it. Two new possible lines: "Just yesterday, a mere block from here" or "Colors burn behind closed eyes"
Peredhil Posted May 3, 2005 Report Posted May 3, 2005 OOC - Yuki-san, it is good to see you here again. *hugs* Colors burn behind closed eyes, Red and yellow, hues of lies, And still I know your mouth will move Spewing sewage your lies to prove. Colors raged inside my heart, Blue and green, believed at the start, And still I think it all worth while When my eyes open to see your smile. Colors rage behind closed eyes, Black and grey, myself I despise, And thought I know you a pretty snake It is your sweet poisons I long to take. Colors rage outside my head, Red and Blue show you're dead, From your body life has risen You're now gone, I'm in your prison. Two lines of choice, what will you choose? "The light of Dawn's first blush" or "I rue the day ye done me wrong"
drummondo Posted May 3, 2005 Report Posted May 3, 2005 The light of dawn's first blush Peeks crimson over trees, And one melodious thrush Sends songs upon the breeze. As music sways emotion And branches, both together, Dawn marvels at the motion Of a new day's happy weather.
Tanuchan Posted October 6, 2005 Report Posted October 6, 2005 (edited) I've always liked this thread... maybe it has died of exhaustion, or just buried away as a consequence of normal activity. Sorry if ressurrecting this one eventually annoys some, but I personally think it's worth it. If it's not, just let it sleep quietly. ~~~~~~~~~ Just yesterday, a mere block from here loyalty was sworn, and eternal love. Just yesterday, a few steps away a prayer was said, eyes rose to the sky. Just yesterday, standing on this door a kiss was stolen, arms hugged tight. And now the news come that yesterday was the last. That the orders have come, and hope has left. That one walks into the night to fight a war in honor's name. Just yesterday, a mere block from here the first meeting, and also the last. ********** The light of dawn's first blush caresses the night and banishes the cold like a friend with caring fingers brushes away the paling dark sends to sleep the hues of black lightly awakes the colors of day. ~~~~~ A new line: Like a river that runs Edited October 6, 2005 by Tanuchan
MinimondoT Posted October 6, 2005 Report Posted October 6, 2005 not my best work but I thought I might try ~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Like a river that runs memories fly Rushing and passing quickly going by Like a river that runs memories go with time they shrink with time they grow Memories remembered Memories forgotten With death memories stopped Not like a River that Runs ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Here's one if anyone wants to try it "Warmth and Strength, Touch and Feel"
word_eyes Posted October 7, 2005 Report Posted October 7, 2005 (edited) warmth and strength, touch and feel a kiss that makes my body peel a love forbidden, well, but wrong cold and young, loved and gone age and boundaries, one more night fantasies and you, reality and I. the "warmth and strenght thing was kind of hard by the way. I know I'm late in the game, but how about: I drink until the water is too shallow for me to drown, or clean names on dirty bathroom walls. Edited October 10, 2005 by word_eyes
MinimondoT Posted October 9, 2005 Report Posted October 9, 2005 the "warmth and strenght thing was kind of hard by the way. I think you did a really good job though!!!
reverie Posted October 9, 2005 Report Posted October 9, 2005 (edited) hell of a line to start with. Profound = Hard. I drink until the water is too shallow for me to drown And lap these dregs so bitter until my feet can touch the ground. I wade until the river runs too far to pull me down. Then search but there's no answer To this riddle that can't be found. Yeah, I took the easy way out...but that was hard @!!#$ Hmm, try: "In sea and swamp and forest" or "Amber girls, oh how they play." Edited October 9, 2005 by reverie
Tanuchan Posted October 9, 2005 Report Posted October 9, 2005 rev, I loved your poem. Very hard to start, but dealt with in such a beautiful way . Thank you for writing that one! ~~~~~~~~ Not nearly good enough, but... Clean names on dirty bathroom walls, faces lost in rugged scrawling. Ignored by scholars, unseen by History, small pieces of extraneous life invading privacy, impressing their mark on blank minds. I'll keep rev's suggested lines, as I haven't used any of them
word_eyes Posted October 12, 2005 Report Posted October 12, 2005 (edited) amber girls, oh how they play burned from neck to thigh never asking how they got that way or answering the curious eyes. charcoal boys, oh how they swing with chartruce men on their backs as flamingo women point and snicker they reflect and laugh. Orange old ladies clear faced strangers, yellow bellied thieves what if we were all the same, with different lives to lead? while gasping for air, I swallowed the sun or naked eyes shiver as the rain begins to dry Edited October 12, 2005 by word_eyes
reverie Posted October 24, 2005 Report Posted October 24, 2005 (edited) Hmm, tricky...on both counts. As for my responce, it's short, but it's all I got... while gasping for air, I swallowed the sun as stars from night's field, flashed quick in my eyes in time with the rhythm of shallow and rise. So run back t'ward heaven, though I was shun. Some say I was wreakless, still it was fun ... Try: For a while, I shall stumble or Sing a song in two's and three's rev... Edited October 24, 2005 by reverie
cryptomancer Posted October 27, 2005 Author Report Posted October 27, 2005 (edited) naked eyes shiver as the rain begins to dry, each ember fusing the lids apart, my emotive reasoning empty and false, the pain of flames dancing in my pulse. like in songs of old the rain hid my tears, a soulless void without a heart, my rational mind rages with selfish fallacy, eyes filling with the green tears of jealousy. woken by the touch of hope and a joyful day, each stopped heartbeat impacts a start, my soul knows the truth of the world we walk, each kissed word exchanged each time we talk. threads of fabric torn in the rain Edited October 27, 2005 by cryptomancer
Guest Phoenix Posted October 28, 2005 Report Posted October 28, 2005 threads of fabric torn in the rain your hand washes my soul again slides down the side of my rain-splattered face how is it we came to be in this place? the darkness recedes as sunlight breaks through and i once again melt into you too far now to touch as once before and yet far too dear for me to ignore too broken to sew together again our wounds are healed in the teeming rain so, calmed by our rest in the eye of the storm you walk away, and the walls reform seems as good a way to start as any! hi guys. thanks for your words, i've had a lot of fun reading in the last few weeks thought i'd join the fun try: singing pure in the moons light xx
Tanuchan Posted October 28, 2005 Report Posted October 28, 2005 (edited) Welcome to the Pen, Phoenix! Glad to know you've been enjoying it here, and hope to see more of your poems around Moonlight Singing pure in the moon's light a voice comes and caresses the heart silvery threads robe a figure willow-slender and frost-cool The Lady of the Night dances and sings luring the traveler into her sweet embrace holding their souls captive in her smile drowning their hope in the gray of her eyes... And with the fading of the moon's light the shadow kingdom retreats once more The Lady of the Night sings a last melody locking a soul forever in her arms. Not quite what I wanted... I might change it a bit and repost . For now, let's see if I can suggest a new line... Silent, soft, steadily advancing ~Tanny Edit: adding a title Edited October 31, 2005 by Tanuchan
Ayshela Posted October 28, 2005 Report Posted October 28, 2005 For a while For a while, I shall stumble numbly in your wake as you weave your steps through circumstance. For a while, I shall slipstream dumbly in your path as you forge the way through this mischance. For a while, I shall follow mutely behind your shield as our hearts heal - 'til again we join the dance.
Ayshela Posted March 29, 2006 Report Posted March 29, 2006 So many wonderful lines that haven't been used, here - bumping for the new people, and i know there's a couple of us had talked about copying all the suggested first lines out to a text file to work from away from the computer, so this will also make it easier to find (and remember) for anyone else wanting to do so. pulling one from further up the page... Colors burn behind closed eyes as figures whirl through memory. Laughing faces dance through time and thought of those I wished to see once more before the page was turned that brought this chapter to its close. I wished to say hello again before time for goodbyes arose. new line: Fashion's altered beauty shines
Sweetcherrie Posted March 29, 2006 Report Posted March 29, 2006 What a good idea to bump this I might just have to find an unused line myself...
Ayshela Posted March 29, 2006 Report Posted March 29, 2006 i do have an "up to the moment" text file with all the first lines, so if anyone wants one but doesn't have time to go through all the pages and copy them out, PM me and i'll pop a copy off to you.
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