First lines

[drummondo]

When time comes and touches your life,

And leaves in an instant, you'll know

In the blink of her eye,

And the softness of skin

As your hands move apart;

It was worth it.

[dragonqueen]

This isn't the most recent line, but whatever. It was instant inspiration, especially since this is something I' ve sort of been meaning to write for a while. The only thing that bothers me is the ending, which was revised a million times.

 

Hordes of emotion attacking the soul,

Defenseless and hurt.

Dying at my own hand.

Fear, anger, hurt

Eating way from the inside out.

Inescapable hurt.

Closing my eyes but it's still there,

This hurt.

Hordes of emotions raging within

Hurt too much

To be contained in one body

 

 

A new line(one that I've sort of been messing around with) : Flamingoes cry pink tears.

[cryptomancer]

Flamingoes cry pink tears,

The blue birds sing 'Purple Rain'

I was once blest by a peacock,

And danced in the colours again.

 

I drifted in the shadows of sunlight,

Found my place in the silver shade,

Amidst the ripples of saltflats,

And the desert of a meadow glade.

 

Lost in the company of friends,

Recognised in the crowds of strangers,

Dancing to 'Purple Rain'

Her tears wet upon my shoulders.

 

 

Line: 'Did ever a breeze dry my eyes'

 

Edited April 30, 2005 by cryptomancer

[cryptomancer]

When Time comes and touches your life,

Each second counted in the soft shift of her hair,

A slow drift of sweet memory,

Kisses of her lips mark hours,

Yet in seconds are gone,

Her embrace could last for years,

Time never allows so long.

Moments measured, often stolen,

Each precious drop if liquid sand

Flowing for her.

Blood in my heart's beating life,

Her love the measure,

Her time, my life.

 

[epinephrine]

Did ever a breeze dry my eyes...

 

Did ever a breeze dry my eyes,

It was the wind of kinship.

Did ever a sound stop my heart,

It was a word of intimacy.

 

When a light washed clean the darkness,

It was your kindness that awoke my eyes.

And when that time comes,

I trust,

 

It will be your hand in mine,

Your voice to guide.

 

Hmmm. That came out a little deeper than I had anticipated. Well here's a new first line anyway:

 

"This is more than I hoped"

 

-epinephrine

[Mynx]

This is more than I'd hoped for

But not less than I'd dreamed

To think they'd allow

For you to see me

 

This is less than I asked for

So much more than I wished

The joy that I felt

When we shared our first kiss

 

This is more than I'd hoped for

Your hand wrapped in mine

Lifebond everlasting

Surviving through Time.

 

New line - Show me you're not afraid

[cryptomancer]

Show me you're not afraid

As with each moment falls,

Casting its shadow in the glass,

Half full, Time stealing seconds,

Each moment a blessing,

Smiles of our time alone

Kissing the mind with hope.

 

Show me you're not afraid,

As with the soft beating,

each moment passes, fleeting,

upon our treasured days,

I long to again find you,

Let my arms entwine you,

captured and unafraid.

 

 

Lines: Echoes of forgotten dreams.

 

Edited May 1, 2005 by cryptomancer

[Yuki Kokoro]

Echoes of forgotten dreams

bounce and clatter in my mind

tumbling through old memories

shredding perceptions of time

 

And though it seems just yesterday

yet oh so many years ago

that I was here last, writing here last

What a long strange trip it's been

 

Last line copywrite of Grateful Dead, but somehow it really seemed like it belonged there, so I borrowed it.

 

Two new possible lines:

 

"Just yesterday, a mere block from here"

or

"Colors burn behind closed eyes"

[Peredhil]

OOC - Yuki-san, it is good to see you here again. *hugs*

 

Colors burn behind closed eyes,

Red and yellow, hues of lies,

And still I know your mouth will move

Spewing sewage your lies to prove.

 

Colors raged inside my heart,

Blue and green, believed at the start,

And still I think it all worth while

When my eyes open to see your smile.

 

Colors rage behind closed eyes,

Black and grey, myself I despise,

And thought I know you a pretty snake

It is your sweet poisons I long to take.

 

Colors rage outside my head,

Red and Blue show you're dead,

From your body life has risen

You're now gone, I'm in your prison.

 

Two lines of choice,

what will you choose?

 

"The light of Dawn's first blush"

or

"I rue the day ye done me wrong"

[drummondo]

The light of dawn's first blush

Peeks crimson over trees,

And one melodious thrush

Sends songs upon the breeze.

As music sways emotion

And branches, both together,

Dawn marvels at the motion

Of a new day's happy weather.

[Tanuchan]

I've always liked this thread... maybe it has died of exhaustion, or just buried away as a consequence of normal activity.

 

Sorry if ressurrecting this one eventually annoys some, but I personally think it's worth it. If it's not, just let it sleep quietly.

 

~~~~~~~~~

 

Just yesterday, a mere block from here

loyalty was sworn, and eternal love.

 

Just yesterday, a few steps away

a prayer was said, eyes rose to the sky.

 

Just yesterday, standing on this door

a kiss was stolen, arms hugged tight.

 

And now the news come

that yesterday was the last.

That the orders have come,

and hope has left.

That one walks into the night

to fight a war in honor's name.

 

Just yesterday, a mere block from here

the first meeting, and also the last.

 

 

**********

 

The light of dawn's first blush

caresses the night and banishes the cold

like a friend with caring fingers

brushes away the paling dark

sends to sleep the hues of black

lightly awakes the colors of day.

 

~~~~~

A new line:

Like a river that runs

Edited October 6, 2005 by Tanuchan

[MinimondoT]

not my best work but I thought I might try

 

~~~~~~~~~~~~~

 

Like a river that runs

memories fly

Rushing and passing

quickly going by

 

Like a river that runs

memories go

with time they shrink

with time they grow

 

Memories remembered

Memories forgotten

With death memories stopped

Not like a River that Runs

 

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

 

Here's one if anyone wants to try it

"Warmth and Strength, Touch and Feel"

[word_eyes]

warmth and strength, touch and feel

a kiss that makes my body peel

a love forbidden, well, but wrong

cold and young, loved and gone

age and boundaries, one more night

fantasies and you, reality and I.

 

 

 

 

the "warmth and strenght thing was kind of hard by the way. I know I'm late in the game, but how about:

 

I drink until the water is too shallow for me to drown,

or

clean names on dirty bathroom walls.

Edited October 10, 2005 by word_eyes

[MinimondoT]

the "warmth and strenght thing was kind of hard by the way.

I think you did a really good job though!!!

[reverie]

hell of a line to start with. Profound = Hard.

 

 

I drink until the water

is too shallow for me to drown

 

And lap these dregs so bitter

until my feet can touch the ground.

 

I wade until the river

runs too far to pull me down.

 

Then search but there's no answer

To this riddle that can't be found.

 

 

 

 

 

Yeah, I took the easy way out...but that was hard @!!#$

 

 

Hmm, try: "In sea and swamp and forest"

 

or "Amber girls, oh how they play."

Edited October 9, 2005 by reverie

[Tanuchan]

rev, I loved your poem. Very hard to start, but dealt with in such a beautiful way .

 

Thank you for writing that one!

 

~~~~~~~~

Not nearly good enough, but...

 

 

Clean names on dirty bathroom walls,

faces lost in rugged scrawling.

Ignored by scholars,

unseen by History,

small pieces of extraneous life

invading privacy,

impressing their mark

on blank minds.

 

 

I'll keep rev's suggested lines, as I haven't used any of them

[word_eyes]

amber girls, oh how they play

burned from neck to thigh

never asking how they got that way

or answering the curious eyes.

 

charcoal boys, oh how they swing

with chartruce men on their backs

as flamingo women point and snicker

they reflect and laugh.

 

Orange old ladies

clear faced strangers,

yellow bellied thieves

what if we were all the same,

with different lives to lead?

 

while gasping for air, I swallowed the sun

or

naked eyes shiver as the rain begins to dry

Edited October 12, 2005 by word_eyes

[reverie]

Hmm, tricky...on both counts.

As for my responce, it's short, but it's all I got...

 

 

while gasping for air, I swallowed the sun

as stars from night's field, flashed quick in my eyes

in time with the rhythm of shallow and rise.

 

So run back t'ward heaven, though I was shun.

Some say I was wreakless, still it was fun

 

 

...

 

Try:

 

 

For a while, I shall stumble

 

or

 

Sing a song in two's and three's

 

 

 

rev...

Edited October 24, 2005 by reverie

[cryptomancer]

naked eyes shiver as the rain begins to dry,

each ember fusing the lids apart,

my emotive reasoning empty and false,

the pain of flames dancing in my pulse.

 

like in songs of old the rain hid my tears,

a soulless void without a heart,

my rational mind rages with selfish fallacy,

eyes filling with the green tears of jealousy.

 

woken by the touch of hope and a joyful day,

each stopped heartbeat impacts a start,

my soul knows the truth of the world we walk,

each kissed word exchanged each time we talk.

 

 

threads of fabric torn in the rain

 

Edited October 27, 2005 by cryptomancer

[Guest Phoenix]

threads of fabric torn in the rain

your hand washes my soul again

slides down the side of my rain-splattered face

how is it we came to be in this place?

the darkness recedes as sunlight breaks through

and i once again melt into you

too far now to touch as once before

and yet far too dear for me to ignore

too broken to sew together again

our wounds are healed in the teeming rain

so, calmed by our rest in the eye of the storm

you walk away, and the walls reform

 

 

seems as good a way to start as any!

 

hi guys. thanks for your words, i've had a lot of fun reading in the last few weeks

 

thought i'd join the fun

 

 

try:

singing pure in the moons light

 

xx

[Tanuchan]

Welcome to the Pen, Phoenix! Glad to know you've been enjoying it here, and hope to see more of your poems around

 

Moonlight

 

Singing pure in the moon's light

a voice comes and caresses the heart

silvery threads robe a figure

willow-slender and frost-cool

The Lady of the Night dances and sings

luring the traveler into her sweet embrace

holding their souls captive in her smile

drowning their hope in the gray of her eyes...

 

And with the fading of the moon's light

the shadow kingdom retreats once more

The Lady of the Night sings a last melody

locking a soul forever in her arms.

 

 

Not quite what I wanted... I might change it a bit and repost . For now, let's see if I can suggest a new line...

 

 

Silent, soft, steadily advancing

 

 

 

~Tanny

 

Edit: adding a title

Edited October 31, 2005 by Tanuchan

[Ayshela]

For a while

 

For a while, I shall stumble

numbly in your wake

as you weave your steps

through circumstance.

For a while, I shall slipstream

dumbly in your path

as you forge the way

through this mischance.

For a while, I shall follow

mutely behind your shield

as our hearts heal -

'til again we join the dance.

[Ayshela]

So many wonderful lines that haven't been used, here - bumping for the new people, and i know there's a couple of us had talked about copying all the suggested first lines out to a text file to work from away from the computer, so this will also make it easier to find (and remember) for anyone else wanting to do so.

 

pulling one from further up the page...

 

Colors burn behind closed eyes

as figures whirl through memory.

Laughing faces dance through time

and thought of those I wished to see

once more before the page was turned

that brought this chapter to its close.

I wished to say hello again

before time for goodbyes arose.

 

 

new line: Fashion's altered beauty shines

[Sweetcherrie]

What a good idea to bump this

 

I might just have to find an unused line myself...

[Ayshela]

i do have an "up to the moment" text file with all the first lines, so if anyone wants one but doesn't have time to go through all the pages and copy them out, PM me and i'll pop a copy off to you.