Finnius Posted July 30, 2004 Report Posted July 30, 2004 I sit and listen to the sounds, Of sighs and laughs, of smooth vibration, The words caress like tribulations, And draw me from my stomping grounds. And light I see, in waves of words, A soul revealed through conversation, The magic transubstantiation, Of soul and heart to vocal chords. And letting down my mask of lies, I show my heart to you, my dear, Bereft of nervous, troubled fear, I show the love that's in my eyes.
Ayshela Posted July 31, 2004 Report Posted July 31, 2004 *nods* beautiful, hon. i'd question caressing like tribulations, as i've found tribulations usually assault rather than caress.. but otherwise.. *nods* beautiful.
Finnius Posted July 31, 2004 Author Report Posted July 31, 2004 On my back and in the sun, Looking out my window pane, Talking, laughing, having fun, Music in your tones refrained. Embauchure of lips and tongue, Sparkling music in your eyes, Light and beauty being sung, In every breath and every sigh. And when the conversation's done, And there I lie still safe and warm, A little colder shines the sun, Until our hearts are one in form.
Ayshela Posted July 31, 2004 Report Posted July 31, 2004 *huggles Finnius* you really are a sweetheart, you know that? i only hope it's properly appreciated.
Finnius Posted August 6, 2004 Author Report Posted August 6, 2004 A whispered word in darkness, still, Catches in my ear and sticks, And beams of light from off the moon, Are on my window, playing tricks. They dance and shimmer like fine wine, Reflecting ballroom lights from eyes, Which lock and smile and hold with mine, To smother and kill all thought of lies. And sweet soft sighing in the night, And laughter, tears, and muted tones, And life that's given, hearts excited, Lets me know I'm not alone.
Finnius Posted August 7, 2004 Author Report Posted August 7, 2004 In no uncertain terms, I've told you many times, Just how I feel about you, And how you fuzz my mind, In no uncertain terms, You've told me many times, To just stop being stubborn, To let myself unwind. In these uncertain times, I won't rephrase my terms, I still want you forever, My core still wants and burns, In these uncertain times, You've never given terms, You're solid and I love you, How I grate and how I yearn. So if uncertain or if not, And in time we'll rise above, In no uncertain terms, What I feel for you is love.
reverie Posted August 8, 2004 Report Posted August 8, 2004 To just stop being stubborn, To let myself unwind hmm... I agree, loosen up seriously. revery the dreamlost "crisom kings..." the dream continues...
Finnius Posted August 10, 2004 Author Report Posted August 10, 2004 Yawning, sighing, sleepy laughing, When I'm dead and beat and sore, And you can always cheer my day, And help me through, to face one more. Making sure to stay alive, If only just to hear your voice, Loving you, my one, my dear, Was never really any choice. And given time, and holding on, To each other through the day, I wait and hope for that sweet time, When with each other we can stay.
Salinye Posted August 11, 2004 Report Posted August 11, 2004 This is very beautiful, Finnius. I really am enjoying it. You have a very romantic soul, Devestating Blueness! ~Salinye
Finnius Posted August 14, 2004 Author Report Posted August 14, 2004 A deep, rich sea, Of sound surrounds, Envelopes me, And lets me drown, My thoughts and fears, In waves of love, And I can hear, From high above, Your voice is calling, A sea so blue, And I am falling, In love with you.
HappyBuddha Posted August 15, 2004 Report Posted August 15, 2004 I like it Finnius, its works really well in my estimation. A bit of constructive criticism: If I were you, I would ditch the line "And lets me drown," it seems slightly superfluous, and more importantly I think it would be better for the reader to catch on to the drowning part on his/her own - its not terrificly subtle about it, and an astute reader could probably catch that. Also, it breaks the flow of the poem, as "Envelopes me" is clearly meant to connect with "My thoughts and fears" and the lines after it, but the "And lets me drown" breaks this up and makes "My thoughts and fears" and the following lines confusing. Otherwise, good job!
Finnius Posted August 15, 2004 Author Report Posted August 15, 2004 I can see your point, Buddha, but try looking at it this way: A deep, rich sea of sound surrounds and envelopes me, And lets me drown my thoughts and fears in waves of love. Oh, and always thanks for the good feedback, and for constructive criticism. *blush* Glad you're all enjoying these... my sappy romantic side gets reserved generally for very few people, and specifically for one person in general. Anyway, that probably made very little sense, so I'm going to go to sleep before I confuzzle that anymore.
Finnius Posted August 16, 2004 Author Report Posted August 16, 2004 I stayed awake all night, And slept the morning through, And went to sleep drifting, Floating on thoughts of you. I wake and roll over, Throw my arm through the air, Wrapping it around you, But, darling, you're not there. My eyes open slowly, Dispelling the surreal, The smokey dream's fading, And in my mind I kneel, Before your blushing face, And tell you how I feel, To spend your life with me, My fondest dream made real.
Finnius Posted August 23, 2004 Author Report Posted August 23, 2004 All the light that I need, All the warmth and your love, All the time in the world, All the rising above, All the laughter and tears, All the helping frustration, All the soothing of fears, All the smiles and elation, All the time in my life, All the things that you do, All of me that is yours, For this do I love you.
Finnius Posted August 25, 2004 Author Report Posted August 25, 2004 On refusal, this I say: I refuse to believe, Refuse to dream, Refuse to live, Refuse to be, Without you. I refuse to think, That some small thing, A matter of no importance, Could keep us apart when, Together we must be. That money, blood, or paperwork, That lack of social history, Or lack of higher learning, Or lack of funds to do these things, Could sway my course, Could bar my path. Refuse to be, And rail against the storm, Head back and defiant, Until I am noticed. And then jump through hoops, And run 'round courses, And say the practic'd things, And do what I must do, Until refusal be lifted. No man, no institution, No slip of paper, Is match for my heart. Or at least I hope so.
Finnius Posted September 4, 2004 Author Report Posted September 4, 2004 Tumbling tossing turning, Across the floor in fun, While my heart's pounding-burning, 'Cause you're my only one.
Finnius Posted September 9, 2004 Author Report Posted September 9, 2004 I don't want to be "me" anymore... I've been "me" for so long, And it's never really worked well. I'm no longer sure just what's in store... And please don't get me wrong, I'm with you through Heaven or Hell. But my heart aches for you, my dear one... I wish this could be done, That no longer would I be just "me." Here I sit and write, heart weighs a ton... When that day rises the sun, When, done with "me," I become a "we."
Finnius Posted September 23, 2004 Author Report Posted September 23, 2004 Simple understanding means, I can tell you every tale, I can laugh, or weep, or rail, Drink from your canteen, Dry the desert in my heart, Let the healing start, And know you won't demean, Know you'll hold my hand, Know you'll understand, Know you'll help me be serene, And when the railing's done, And we're standing in the sun; That's what loving means.
Tattered Posted September 29, 2004 Report Posted September 29, 2004 I really enjoyed that, thanks for writing it...
Finnius Posted October 9, 2004 Author Report Posted October 9, 2004 Three little words, unstuck from my throat, Three little words that I love to say, Or write in a silly, romanticized note, And just let you know, at least once a day, That three little words, whether spoken or wrote, Are true at all times, and true in all ways. I'm yours and you're mine, And together we'll stay, With each other entwined, Every night, every day. Think of me when you sleep, Know my arms are around you, And up behind you I'll creep, And speak three words that are still true.
Finnius Posted October 28, 2004 Author Report Posted October 28, 2004 If clinging is a sin, Then of it I am guilty, For I cling night and day, Like a flower that is wilting, From lack of warmest sun. With neither shape nor form, I cling to thoughts of you, And hold on to your mem'ry, Maybe sappy, but it's true, And my resolve is firm. With you I'll spend my days, In good times and in bad, With you my heart will stay, Whether sane or whether mad, I'm yours, for now and always.
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