Mira Posted July 27, 2004 Report Posted July 27, 2004 I wrote these a week or two back when I was attending my orientation in beautiful East Lansing. I was sitting in the dorm room I had for the night, listening to the sounds of the city (which compared to many of you might have passed for relative silence) and feeling rather disappointed, because I could only see a handful of stars due to the light-pollution. They would probably be more significant if you had been there. #43 Tap, tap, tap The water falls from the leaky showerhead next door. The noise keeps me from my dreams. It calls out a cadence, For my fingers to follow As they guide my sad pencil Across this bleak page. #44 I am alone In this vast open sea Unseen and unheeded My actions go unnoticed Except but by me.
Salinye Posted July 27, 2004 Report Posted July 27, 2004 Simple. Eloquent and to the point. I sort of feel the few words give it more power. I also think they are sad. I hope you don't really feel that way. Would be a shame. ~Salinye
reverie Posted July 27, 2004 Report Posted July 27, 2004 lovely little gems mira... simple and refined rev...
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