MinimondoT Posted July 20, 2004 Report Posted July 20, 2004 A girl and her diary, classic, picturesque. Her stories, though, each her own. Each girl and each diary a snowflake, shaped by the events that all together are hers alone. I am such a girl with such a diary. I am 19 and I am changed. A book received, as a birthday gift became a friend and confidant Also more, it became a mirror, a reflection of me Of who I was and who I am now. The girl in my diary is part of me, But she who started it has aged and learned. She has learned and loved. She has lost love, and learned to love again. She has met new people and experienced new things. She has been changed. The pages of her diary ring with her laughter and shrink from her tears. There are words that she remembers little and others that will forever be in her heart. In two years so much has been written, So much had changed. Two years so long Two years so short. The entries long and short as well, Some day by day, others with months in between, Tell a tale of the girl who wrote them Tell a tale even I have missed I who is she She who wrote I was 17 I am 19 I am changed.
Jade Posted July 20, 2004 Report Posted July 20, 2004 I tried to keep a diary once. I really don't have the discipline. So congratulations on that, especially. Onto the poem: it has a nice running theme that fits well into your ending. The examples you use to show change are effective. Overall: good job. In the banquet room, when you click post, a "mail error" flashes. You do not need to go back and re-post. The Pen has caught it. Welcome to the Pen.
Peredhil Posted July 20, 2004 Report Posted July 20, 2004 Welcome! I like the theme and you captured it well. The sense of "I", for most people, remains a constant no matter how they've changed. A diary or journal helps to capture the truth that we are works in progress everchanging. On the other hand, it can capture that some are ripples in a stream, endlessly repeating the same life patterns with different circumstances. Thoughtful and thought-provoking. And punctuated! Hugs Peredhil
Zen Posted July 20, 2004 Report Posted July 20, 2004 I feel i should write something, but all I can think of saying right now is thank you for the wonderful poem.
Ayshela Posted July 20, 2004 Report Posted July 20, 2004 Welcome, glad to see you post and looking forward to seeing much more! This is nicely done. It flows well, while pondering a path around a moment of realization.
dragonqueen Posted July 21, 2004 Report Posted July 21, 2004 This is great. I especially like the line Each girl and each diary a snowflake,. The format seems perfect. Super cool.
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