Vanessa Posted July 18, 2004 Report Posted July 18, 2004 (edited) I saw a laughing englishman go walking down the street, Smiling, waving, shaking hands with all he seemed to meet. A joyous thing it was to see this happy smiling one, And all he spoke to laughed as well, joining in the fun! All except for one old man-he didn't join the laugher. He turned his scowl upon the bloke-said "Look mate, what you after?" "I'm just here to spread my joy," The laugher then replied. He turned away, and laughed again-the old man merely sighed. From his coat he pulled out cuffs, "You're nicked mate!" he said, "Disturbance of the public peace, you should have stayed in bed!" Comments? Questions? Suggestions? Feel free to post! Spelling corrected July 19th 06:51 Edited July 19, 2004 by Vanessa
Finnius Posted July 18, 2004 Report Posted July 18, 2004 From a technical standpoint, (And it should be noted that technical poetry is not my strong point.) I thought it was solid, had a good flow, and sounded very nice on the tongue. All of which pretty much means the same thing, but compliments always sound better in threes, don'tcha think? My only complaint is the "your" should be a "you're." As for the material, I loved it! Simple and elegant, yet pleasingly full-bodied and heady... no wait, that's Dewars... In any case, I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work! (Yes, I'm headhunting for the AAA. Don't ask questions.)
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