_Zen_ Posted July 5, 2004 Report Share Posted July 5, 2004 could it be that i've felt it, and yet not said; those evenings together when we lied in bed. tami, i'm falling for you. did you know all along, the way that i felt? and played your hand the way it was dealt. tami, reassure me. and now that i know, what thorns your rose bears, could you be kind, and answer my prayers? tami, be with me. now i know it wont be a walk in the park, but theres something special when we're alone in the dark. tami, I want you. my passion, and happiness in being with you, could never be questioned as being untrue. tami, I need you. so reply to this passionate shepherd's plea, if you're the one nymph that i think you may be. tami, call me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yuki Kokoro Posted July 6, 2004 Report Share Posted July 6, 2004 I liked this; it was sweet and simple. The single lines helped the rhyme from seeming constricting and repetitive and made the poem fall into a good rhythm for me. I especially like the last line, it was a slight surprise and I finished the poem with a smile on my face. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Zen_ Posted July 6, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 6, 2004 well i must admit, "the passionate shepherd to his love" has always been one of my favorite poems, so i lept at the chance to do a "shout out" as they say. hehe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
WrenWind Posted July 6, 2004 Report Share Posted July 6, 2004 Nice to see you write somethhing. It has been a while. I liked the style. Wren *hugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beautiful Nightmare Posted July 10, 2004 Report Share Posted July 10, 2004 *smiles* good to see you writting again sweety! Written for anyone i know?! Good poem i like the structure and style. Ive missed you... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
_Zen_ Posted July 15, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 15, 2004 hmm, actually i think you might know her. she goes by the name sefira. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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