to Tami, the nymph

[_Zen_]

could it be that i've felt it, and yet not said;

those evenings together when we lied in bed.

 

tami, i'm falling for you.

 

did you know all along, the way that i felt?

and played your hand the way it was dealt.

 

tami, reassure me.

 

and now that i know, what thorns your rose bears,

could you be kind, and answer my prayers?

 

tami, be with me.

 

now i know it wont be a walk in the park,

but theres something special when we're alone in the dark.

 

tami, I want you.

 

my passion, and happiness in being with you,

could never be questioned as being untrue.

 

tami, I need you.

 

so reply to this passionate shepherd's plea,

if you're the one nymph that i think you may be.

 

tami, call me.

[Yuki Kokoro]

I liked this; it was sweet and simple. The single lines helped the rhyme from seeming constricting and repetitive and made the poem fall into a good rhythm for me.

 

I especially like the last line, it was a slight surprise and I finished the poem with a smile on my face.

[_Zen_]

well i must admit, "the passionate shepherd to his love" has always been one of my favorite poems, so i lept at the chance to do a "shout out" as they say. hehe

[WrenWind]

Nice to see you write somethhing. It has been a while. I liked the style.

 

Wren

*hugs*

[Beautiful Nightmare]

*smiles* good to see you writting again sweety! Written for anyone i know?! Good poem i like the structure and style. Ive missed you...

[_Zen_]

hmm, actually i think you might know her. she goes by the name sefira.