_Zen_ Posted July 5, 2004 Report Posted July 5, 2004 could it be that i've felt it, and yet not said; those evenings together when we lied in bed. tami, i'm falling for you. did you know all along, the way that i felt? and played your hand the way it was dealt. tami, reassure me. and now that i know, what thorns your rose bears, could you be kind, and answer my prayers? tami, be with me. now i know it wont be a walk in the park, but theres something special when we're alone in the dark. tami, I want you. my passion, and happiness in being with you, could never be questioned as being untrue. tami, I need you. so reply to this passionate shepherd's plea, if you're the one nymph that i think you may be. tami, call me.
Yuki Kokoro Posted July 6, 2004 Report Posted July 6, 2004 I liked this; it was sweet and simple. The single lines helped the rhyme from seeming constricting and repetitive and made the poem fall into a good rhythm for me. I especially like the last line, it was a slight surprise and I finished the poem with a smile on my face.
_Zen_ Posted July 6, 2004 Author Report Posted July 6, 2004 well i must admit, "the passionate shepherd to his love" has always been one of my favorite poems, so i lept at the chance to do a "shout out" as they say. hehe
WrenWind Posted July 6, 2004 Report Posted July 6, 2004 Nice to see you write somethhing. It has been a while. I liked the style. Wren *hugs*
Beautiful Nightmare Posted July 10, 2004 Report Posted July 10, 2004 *smiles* good to see you writting again sweety! Written for anyone i know?! Good poem i like the structure and style. Ive missed you...
_Zen_ Posted July 15, 2004 Author Report Posted July 15, 2004 hmm, actually i think you might know her. she goes by the name sefira.
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